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REFLECTION
It has been a long time since I have written anything... at least a good couple of years....
I’m living in a waste land and I need to take a stand
I’ve never been a fake man so I must make plans
We all fail along the way but still the song remains
Am I wrong to say that most people have gone astray?
We all lose our path or ever really choose our past
We all grew and laughed or we would lose our grasp
Things are never the same or ever worth the pain
Dreams are forever insane so it all hurts the same
Really
Have you seen the earth today? Evil is her display
I see teams of jerks today! People are far worse today
Damn it! We all need this planet, were disadvantaged
Its semantics are systematic as if doing wrong is a habit
Now Our
Wars looming, Muslim vs. Christian, cousins vs. his kids
Scores are fueling somethin vs wisdom, and it wasn’t his list
Gods watching over his kids, but can’t stop all the dipshits
He’s got to drop these fake religious misfits with a hit list
But
Tyrants come in all colors, even your vibrant brother
I’ve seen some violent mothers turn into defiant lovers
Leaving behind kids, Moms thinking it was fine to dip
I’m thinking that my skid was really never mine to live
I’ve paved my own path & sometimes made my own bath
I really hate to know that sometimes people have no tact
Is it Armageddon? People with armed weapons are stressin
I see more harm than livin, deceitful lessons are progressin
I try to stay true and never ever try to debate or hate you
I realize that I’ll degrade you, filet you and even fake truth
My name is humanity that’s damned to be its own calamity
God please give amnesty to all of these prone families
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02-26-2015, 04:50 PM
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REFLECTION
It has been a long time since I have written anything... at least a good couple of years....
I’m living in a waste land and I need to take a stand
I’ve never been a fake man so I must make plans
We all fail along the way but still the song remains
Am I wrong to say that most people have gone astray?
We all lose our path or ever really choose our past
We all grew and laughed or we would lose our grasp
Things are never the same or ever worth the pain
Dreams are forever insane so it all hurts the same
Really
Have you seen the earth today? Evil is her display
I see teams of jerks today! People are far worse today
Damn it! We all need this planet, were disadvantaged
Its semantics are systematic as if doing wrong is a habit
Now Our
Wars looming, Muslim vs. Christian, cousins vs. his kids
Scores are fueling somethin vs wisdom, and it wasn’t his list
Gods watching over his kids, but can’t stop all the dipshits
He’s got to drop these fake religious misfits with a hit list
But
Tyrants come in all colors, even your vibrant brother
I’ve seen some violent mothers turn into defiant lovers
Leaving behind kids, Moms thinking it was fine to dip
I’m thinking that my skid was really never mine to live
I’ve paved my own path & sometimes made my own bath
I really hate to know that sometimes people have no tact
Is it Armageddon? People with armed weapons are stressin
I see more harm than livin, deceitful lessons are progressin
I try to stay true and never ever try to debate or hate you
I realize that I’ll degrade you, filet you and even fake truth
My name is humanity that’s damned to be its own calamity
God please give amnesty to all of these prone families
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05-13-2015, 03:20 PM
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This is part of the reason why I stopped... Forums are either dead or people are lazy and don't care anymore....
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05-13-2015, 03:20 PM
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This is part of the reason why I stopped... Forums are either dead or people are lazy and don't care anymore....
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10-11-2015, 11:11 PM
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Concept is alright, nothing super creative but still original in your own way. I feel like the rhyming here was simple. The single syllable shit got boring pretty quickly. Man, damn, sam, jam. It's like I was reading a piece back in 2005. lol. Overall I think you need to try being more creative both with the concept and the rhyme scheme and open up your vocabulary some.
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Concept is alright, nothing super creative but still original in your own way. I feel like the rhyming here was simple. The single syllable shit got boring pretty quickly. Man, damn, sam, jam. It's like I was reading a piece back in 2005. lol. Overall I think you need to try being more creative both with the concept and the rhyme scheme and open up your vocabulary some.
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11-24-2015, 08:56 PM
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Originally Posted by King Balor
Concept is alright, nothing super creative but still original in your own way. I feel like the rhyming here was simple. The single syllable shit got boring pretty quickly. Man, damn, sam, jam. It's like I was reading a piece back in 2005. lol. Overall I think you need to try being more creative both with the concept and the rhyme scheme and open up your vocabulary some.
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No need because I meant to make it simple.... I am a multi-monster who has the rhyme scheme and vocab to boot....
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SymBoliQ
Doing this for far too long.... and have not written anything in a long time.. just felt like doing something simple...
Thanks for checking it out
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Maybe saying multi-monster laid it on thick...lol.. let's just say that I was pretty good with my multi's and vocab.... I lost in the topical finals against Dolo and if I remember right I did win a tourney here.... it has been awhile and my mind must be slipping
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11-24-2015, 08:56 PM
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Originally Posted by King Balor
Concept is alright, nothing super creative but still original in your own way. I feel like the rhyming here was simple. The single syllable shit got boring pretty quickly. Man, damn, sam, jam. It's like I was reading a piece back in 2005. lol. Overall I think you need to try being more creative both with the concept and the rhyme scheme and open up your vocabulary some.
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No need because I meant to make it simple.... I am a multi-monster who has the rhyme scheme and vocab to boot....
InCizion
SymBoliQ
Doing this for far too long.... and have not written anything in a long time.. just felt like doing something simple...
Thanks for checking it out
---------- Post added at 05:56 PM ---------- Previous post was at 05:37 PM ----------
Maybe saying multi-monster laid it on thick...lol.. let's just say that I was pretty good with my multi's and vocab.... I lost in the topical finals against Dolo and if I remember right I did win a tourney here.... it has been awhile and my mind must be slipping
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