Preciate the dope battle bruh... LOD!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-24 01:11:51

idk if it's just me but i think caked out need to correct his multies...fairs in... Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-24 01:45:57

wow im confused but both did good Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-24 03:56:07

Tough call on this 1. Both had a couple rly solid lines & a couple weaker ones ... & despite one starting a bit stronger and having what was imo the best line of the battle the other was much more consistent throughout their drop with smoother wp and an overall better 2nd half/closer. FVs in Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-24 12:51:20

solid battle. feel both stayed neck and neck in this one. hard to pick a winner. both were similar in all aspects but feel one stayed more consistent from beginning to end. both had their ups and downs though. my fairs in. solid spar fellas. G'luck. Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-24 13:15:38

3-6 removed Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-24 18:35:54

LoD. Comment Only
Posted on: 2014-04-24 20:12:49

man. my winner went hamburger. Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-24 21:40:28

From the top. Caked: The biggest flaw of your verse was your inability to hold a scheme. It's really underwhelming to see a different scheme for each line: Effectively you rhymed one scheme once for each line. Something you should work on is creating scheme structures and holding them. First bar; Shang Tsung/Soul steal reference was alright. Conceptually, not very strong but it worked as a personal. The rhyme scheme for the second verse was awful: Rhyming with American is always tricky and I've never seen many great attempts. Soul food? It was a sub-decent play on words and wasn't really worth putting into the verse. Soul cans/Sold cans - That's not a wordplay. Not enough clarity or connection. With that wordplay falling through, the entire line didn't work. Alzheimers/Erase his Brain - subpar concept, didn't work for me. The closer was consistent with the rest of the verse and lacked conceptual weight. It's evident that you have a basic grasp on what a punch is but you haven't quite got the hang of effective double entendres and wordplays. Keep plugging at it and be sure to work on your scheming. SoulL: Opener was a very basic wordplay, I've always hated single word wordplays that don't end up amounting to much. Your scheming was not unlike CakedOut's but with a few exceptions, extending your schemes perhaps half a bar longer in places. Your verse improved somewhat from there. "Poppin outta cake" - I understand the reference, but where's the double entendre? Set that up before attempting a punch. The next scheme was decent, the Texas Chainsaw Massacre reference was clear, but the rhyme scheme fell off at the punch: It was incredibly forced. CHAINSAW/AR's rhyming with PLANE, GONE? I don't recognise that as a rhyming multi. Next was another basic wordplay with little (or no) relevance. The closer had no real punchline... I have to say badder/batter isn't a real wordplay. Can'll is a poor wordplay for candle. I guess "ice in" made sense, aurally, but it's a very basic wordplay. I was let down by that. You need to work on 1) holding a scheme and 2) creating more complex wordplays and staying consistent with double entendres (double-sided concepts). Both verses were below par but I see a lot of potential. Winner got this with a few more solid punches that had more conceptual weight to them. Vitty's vote's in. Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-24 22:21:18

FV Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-25 09:33:15

daam good shit to both..loser impressed me but wasn't enough for the win...fairs in fellas Voted: SoulL /
Posted on: 2014-04-26 20:28:05