Round 1: Intricate Skillz Vs steeLio (Intricate Skillz Wins 5-2)

Intricate Skillz Vs steeLio
Letsbeef Topical Tournament 2011 Round 1

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(Note: Deadlines are 1 week due to Sandman's tournament round. Other rounds will be shorter)

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Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow
Vocabulary
Topic/Meaning
Storytelling/Progression
Emotion
Imagery
Poetic Techniques
Ending

GOOD LUCK

[ozark]

Check homie-

[RhetoriK]

Checking in.

[ozark]

** * * * * * *Prelude to Battle*

Camp fires burn in the distance. They witness the glows, below Orions Belt.
marching in rows, and hoisting there bows, as loved ones cried, beneath the surface the cryins felt.
Their nerves were rattled, as if pierced by a thousand needles,*
But aside their brothers, spirits were high as the brows of eagles.
Tho some dry heaved, over thoughts of this war for land,
Why? Believed to be politics, sent to their deaths far from sand.
Stories of past battles, brought grim feelings amongst the soldiers in arms,
Breaths start to gasp, but thoughts of their familys help them shoulder the warmth.
Today is the day, yet fate is held distant, the battle is on,
No one sleeps, as infant fears arise, every ones loathing the dawn.
The sun starts to peek through the trees as the fog sets,
as if smokes covered the earth, from the trees, leakes a mass of silohouetts.
Overwhelmd, and out numbered, the soldiers try to muster confidence,
But caught, in what seems a pre determined dream, a cluster of consequence.
their boots are laced tight, pistols are holstered,
Ready to embrace the fight, they let out whistles, so their morale bolsters.
Anxious feelings grow colder, all of a sudden,
This is it, with all their uniforms botton'd.
Shots ring out, some one leads the charge of soldiers,
With the first death gone, the pre lude to battle is over.








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[ozark]

Sorry im on my phone so the format is outta wack-

[RhetoriK]

Thrown up from the phone, what!!

"One Face Of Death"

Internal conflicts, external resolution.. / Syths sweep the
battlefield. Death hurls the mezzaluna /
Different attire, but the "fatigue is all the same" / Sadistic type
war-heads "feelin all the pain" /
The fire and rain arbitrate where smoke'll settle, blades air eneimies
but why the hell we choke metal? /
Sound boy play revel, I am todays devil, groundbreaking visional Ace
of Spades with Grey shovels /
Diplomacy is a "Two headed Lion" / Primogeneic benifit though the
death while dueling the scion /
Does Scissor Tounged Eloquence, downplay Whips, Guns and Elephant
saddled benevolence? Irrelevant. /
I "Prey, to live to tell of it." We "Buy Bull" Tired of getting
theologically sodomized, I'm now cellabut /
Fighting for the right to die for something / Ironically that makes dying nothing /
I'm lustimg the end of the dispute in this irrefrgable minute of repute /
Seeminglessly Destitute, searching for the restitude to enlightn my children's generstion of our leaders ineptitude /
Battle in my blood, I feel this life is a leper's nuse /
Vexed, abused with weapons used neglectin truth for accptance to...
A new world.
A monochromatic ended is still splended yet suspended
Because the picture embedded in my mind is nothing but a "black and white image"...

The account of a soldier.


Quick one from work. Good luck.

[ozark]

Good luck homie

[ozark]

Bumpin it up

[Eye G]

Rhyming Scheme/Flow- : steeLio / intricated skillz
Vocabulary- : SteElio
Topic/Meaning- : SteElio
Storytelling/Progression- : both were good
Emotion- : steeLio
Imagery- : both
Poetic Techniques- : SteeLio
Ending- : intricated skillz

vote goes to SteeLio/....no h8 fair is in...

[Wigsplit]

Voting Rubix
Rhyming Scheme/Flow- I think they both did really well, tie
Vocabulary- Steelio, but Skillz had some good shit in this cat too
Topic/Meaning- Ima give it too Skillz, I liked how he gave the story before the battle, the build up was nice
Storytelling/Progression- Skillz, imo his was easier to follow, and it started off well and ended well, Steelio was nice too
Emotion- Skillz got it for me, he told how the people felt leading up to the war really good, I was feelin the emotion on Steelios as well, but it didnt hit as hard for me
Imagery- Skillz once again, he painted a very good picture, impressed me
Poetic Techniques- Tie, both was good in this one
Ending- Skillz, I jus liked how it all went together, Steelios didnt hit as hard for me

Overall Vote- Intricate Skillz, I just felt his more, he did really good putting it together and flowing it nicely, Steelios was nice, but didnt grasp my attention like Skillz, good shit from both, yall did a good job, for real lol