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Originally Posted by ClydeChamp
@ Crysis i sent you 16 already... break those down
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It's not in my inbox, send them again.
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All these bodies poppin up like i've been workin for FEMA lately
Im shootin llamas to kill these cats now PETA hate me
This wasn't too terrible, four syllable multi matched with a metaphoric concept. The only part that is bad is the "shooting llamas to kill these cats" part. You wouldn't shoot an actual llama to kill a cat. That's illogical, you could have said "I'm usin' llamas to kill these cats" to make it, all be it still illogical, yet more sensible.
My name should be changed to Django imma whip this Anglo-SAXXon
if its war then its war bang yo gat then
Basic bar, no punchline or concept that shows creativity or any real hard hitting aspects. The only part of the bar that makes it anything less than irrevocably basic is the four syllable multi.
No hair pin but imma put a clip in yo wig
Who ever I phone will put a clip in yo hip
Spider-Man stuntman you better stick to the script
This is a battle TEXT if i see SAXX ol phone then he'll get beat wit a instrument
Even more basic than the last bar, one syllable multi's to match with a broken multi. Rhyming "wig" and "hip" doesn't win battles.
If its beef at stake then banana clips get hot if you g- rill-us
I like my privacy i'll smash your cam if you go-reel-us
what im sayin is my boys carrying that crome wit that silverback like gorillas
What the fuck does it mean to "g- rill" someone?
What the fuck does it mean to "reel" someone?
How the fuck does "carrying that crome" equate to silverback gorillas?
Terrible bar.
This is a trail so who am i to judge if i let one go in the chamber till that case drop
that 8 pop and find you out by the pier(peer) for your jewelry(jury)
I'll sell you white flakes on a nice day you swear it was flurry
Jewelry in no way matches with Jury. Jewelry in no way rhymes with Flurry.
I really don't want to read another verse like this tbh..