ILLMANIA 4: Topical Battle - Dirty Work Vs Wonderbred Vs Virgil - Page 3 - Lets Beef

**RULE** · #21 06-21-2014, 04:05 AM

I wanted to avoid any type of Illmania related person voting on this but it seems we have little choice.

@Erupt i invite you to vote.

**RULE** · 06-21-2014, 04:05 AM

I wanted to avoid any type of Illmania related person voting on this but it seems we have little choice.

@Erupt i invite you to vote.

**SAND** · #22 06-21-2014, 11:14 AM

gawdam.

**SAND** · 06-21-2014, 11:14 AM

gawdam.

**RULE** · #23 06-21-2014, 01:18 PM

Inviting FVC member @Wizdumb to vote.

**RULE** · 06-21-2014, 01:18 PM

Inviting FVC member @Wizdumb to vote.

#24 06-21-2014, 01:55 PM

damn virgil

06-21-2014, 01:55 PM

damn virgil

**Aggo** · #25 06-21-2014, 02:00 PM

I like that Virgil LoDs self proclaimed "secret weapon" can potentially be the reason they lose.

**Aggo** · 06-21-2014, 02:00 PM

I like that Virgil LoDs self proclaimed "secret weapon" can potentially be the reason they lose.

**Wizdumb** · #26 06-21-2014, 02:33 PM

Briefly, the first piece was worded effectively and as a result it read much smoother than the latter. The author did a great job of painting a mental image for the reader and although I wasnt particularily fond of how certain parts of the story seemed to contradict others(the bear being lost/thrown while 'Billy' concludes that he thinks it's in a better place) or the ending in general, the verse as a whole was both engaging and enjoyable.

The second writer utilized an impressive vocabulary to compose a verse that was much more realistic and straight-forward, however their scheme-work and presentation was fairly bland, which resulted in a more-complex, but overall less entertaining read.

MVGT: Verse 1

**Wizdumb** · 06-21-2014, 02:33 PM

Briefly, the first piece was worded effectively and as a result it read much smoother than the latter. The author did a great job of painting a mental image for the reader and although I wasnt particularily fond of how certain parts of the story seemed to contradict others(the bear being lost/thrown while 'Billy' concludes that he thinks it's in a better place) or the ending in general, the verse as a whole was both engaging and enjoyable.

The second writer utilized an impressive vocabulary to compose a verse that was much more realistic and straight-forward, however their scheme-work and presentation was fairly bland, which resulted in a more-complex, but overall less entertaining read.

MVGT: Verse 1

**RULE** · #27 06-21-2014, 02:37 PM

Battles scored at 4-3 now.

@Jason, @Erupt, @Student & @Dissizit.

First to 5 wins.

**RULE** · 06-21-2014, 02:37 PM

Battles scored at 4-3 now.

@Jason, @Erupt, @Student & @Dissizit.

First to 5 wins.

**RULE** · #28 06-21-2014, 03:30 PM

Invited @Dysfunctional to vote on this. He's had 5+ topical battles on LB.

**RULE** · 06-21-2014, 03:30 PM

Invited @Dysfunctional to vote on this. He's had 5+ topical battles on LB.

**Dysfunctional** · #29 06-21-2014, 03:37 PM

I got permission from Rule to vote on this so here we go.

1st Topical: I really liked the story here and creative i thought. The flow was there the vocab was there everything was there to make this a good topical. I agree with I believe Rule said it? it had a toy story esque feel to it but I actually liked that. Through just letters back and forth you showed the story progression really well. Overall this was a really damn good topical.

2nd Topical: The flow was a bit iffy in a couple lines other then that the flow was really good. I think it was the third stanza flowed fucking beautifully. The story was not vague but a little to mysterious for me. It took me a little bit to figure out what the story was. But when i figured it out I was like wow that was good. Also that last line? Fucking Brilliant. Overall another really damn good topical.

Decision: I believe structure and things do matter in topicals. But the most important thing I believe is how well the story resonates to people and the creativity and uniqueness put into it. For those reasons MVGT Topical #1

**Dysfunctional** · 06-21-2014, 03:37 PM

I got permission from Rule to vote on this so here we go.

1st Topical: I really liked the story here and creative i thought. The flow was there the vocab was there everything was there to make this a good topical. I agree with I believe Rule said it? it had a toy story esque feel to it but I actually liked that. Through just letters back and forth you showed the story progression really well. Overall this was a really damn good topical.

2nd Topical: The flow was a bit iffy in a couple lines other then that the flow was really good. I think it was the third stanza flowed fucking beautifully. The story was not vague but a little to mysterious for me. It took me a little bit to figure out what the story was. But when i figured it out I was like wow that was good. Also that last line? Fucking Brilliant. Overall another really damn good topical.

Decision: I believe structure and things do matter in topicals. But the most important thing I believe is how well the story resonates to people and the creativity and uniqueness put into it. For those reasons MVGT Topical #1

**RULE** · #30 06-21-2014, 03:40 PM

Thank holy fuck this battle is now closed via 5-3 victory for Verse one.

I can announce that verse one was Wonderbred of Murda Muzik. So congrats to him.

Major props to Dirt Work of The AC's for a great topical battle.

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**RULE** · 06-21-2014, 03:40 PM

Thank holy fuck this battle is now closed via 5-3 victory for Verse one.

I can announce that verse one was Wonderbred of Murda Muzik. So congrats to him.

Major props to Dirt Work of The AC's for a great topical battle.

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