Confused By 1 bar

[Tek Notez]

you say "had to plan it" not had to planned it", the bar is good and there are no mistakes lol

congratz UA

[Prose_]

Askaris bar was executed in an akward way but UAs bar was kinda played. I feel as if people straight up overlooked that a bit. No doubt UA won and I'm not tryna be an asshole but let's not act like that was UAs best.

That being said... Congrats.. U, Rule, and Daddio in a 3 way tie for GOAT in my book.

[Just C]

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imtoopissed for this right niw.

[Phroxen]

Allow me to speak for @Just C .

Originally Posted by UNKNOWN ARTIST

It's the best way to word it keeping it making the most sense in both ways ... It's the first few words of the set up ... Not the main punch .... Getting a little fed up with people putting my lines under the microspcope when they should spend more time focusing on their own.

In your own words, you just said that the wording in your setup wasn't good. Other people in this thread who actually know what they're talking about are agreeing with this. That's all that's being said.

I see what @Verity was talking about in that other thread. It's sad how people hold back from criticizing people because they think they're gonna catch feelings or some shit. lol @ microscope.

Look, here's a microscope..

Originally Posted by YOU WISH

For "Son to be in front of me" he had to really "plan it, or bit"(planet orbit) cuz I'm unSHAKEABLE HERE so if you "think he's a star" then MAYBE IT'S CLEAR I'm "rapping rings around son" every DAY OF THE YEAR

Most people probably missed the point that you used a weak opener (son to be in front of me). You had to call him "son" which is lame, especially when your entire bar focuses on that. Plus, most son/sun wordplay is preschool shit. It's like holmes/homes.. "Unshakeable here" is a filler multi that doesn't tie into your theme or do anything else besides slightly boast. "Think he's a star / (w)rapping rings around son".. again, same "son" shit I mentioned before. Plus the double meanings are weak here.. you'll rap circles around him... because people think he's a star.. and the sun is a star.. so you'll call him son and make it all work out? Pfft. PLUS, going back to your first part "son to be in front of me / planet orbit".. in front of me is a stretch that most will overlook. Each planet spins on an axis, therefore "sun" won't be in front of them all the time. You could've said "for son to be behind me" and it'd make the same amount of sense.


Moral of the story: You won with a weak bar. Congrats.

[Student]

Granted I'm Not Even An Average Texter BUT I'm Pretty Sure unSHAKEABLE HERE Refers To The Way A Planet's Orbit Is Unmovable And Here Refers To "Space" So For Me, Yes It Made Sense.

[Askari]

Both bars were sloppy, it just so happens mines was sloppier. That's what happens when you rush things lol.

[remarK]

I thought the bar was ill ..

reminded me of the battle I had with you, Rule. Where i said somethin' like: "you couldn't beat me if you recycled "Or-Bit a Cat" like sending animals to space" lol

[Just C]

Man I was fucked up last night. I´m not getting like that again. Jeus. But yeah Everyone got different opinions, I said my peice. otheres said theres. lets leave it at that.

Congrats on another 1 bar win my man.

[Catharsis]

This is the Text vs Audio thing right here.
In Text if the tense or sentence structure is incorrect it throws it off at least initially for the reader, as where in Audio your flow is your flow...no one could misinterpret it.

[UNKNOWN ARTIST]

Originally Posted by Phroxen

Allow me to speak for @Just C .



In your own words, you just said that the wording in your setup wasn't good. Other people in this thread who actually know what they're talking about are agreeing with this. That's all that's being said.

I see what @Verity was talking about in that other thread. It's sad how people hold back from criticizing people because they think they're gonna catch feelings or some shit. lol @ microscope.

Look, here's a microscope..





Most people probably missed the point that you used a weak opener (son to be in front of me). You had to call him "son" which is lame, especially when your entire bar focuses on that. Plus, most son/sun wordplay is preschool shit. It's like holmes/homes.. "Unshakeable here" is a filler multi that doesn't tie into your theme or do anything else besides slightly boast. "Think he's a star / (w)rapping rings around son".. again, same "son" shit I mentioned before. Plus the double meanings are weak here.. you'll rap circles around him... because people think he's a star.. and the sun is a star.. so you'll call him son and make it all work out? Pfft. PLUS, going back to your first part "son to be in front of me / planet orbit".. in front of me is a stretch that most will overlook. Each planet spins on an axis, therefore "sun" won't be in front of them all the time. You could've said "for son to be behind me" and it'd make the same amount of sense.


Moral of the story: You won with a weak bar. Congrats.

This is getting boring now....No ... There was no filler..student gets it... And where did I imply he had to be in front of me all the time?... Your the one whos streatching trying to find flaws .... I just checked your most recent battle ...That was ALL filler... I wouldn't stoop so low as to start posting your bars but maybe you should turn that microscope on your own shit and spend the same amount of time and effort there ... Might be time better spent