Everyone welcome to constructively shit on my track

[Jason]

Originally Posted by ViTRiOL

It's terrible Jason.

I literally want to press it onto a toilet shaped vinyl and defecate on it until it looks like a pile of elephant shit.

Seriously.

haha, i figured with a comment w/ this much ego you must be superb or somethin so i check your audio and text battles ... lol

if i can help you achieve your goal in any way just holler tho .

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Originally Posted by KasperX

you ride the beat well and the flow is pretty cool but you could probably rerecord it speak a little clearer and get a tad bit more into it

pretty close though I like it dawg

peep mine

word i hear that .. i packed a few too many words in certain bars and i had to say em really fast to pack it all in .. came across a little forced

preciate the feedback .. ima check that song

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just checked... youre not exclusive .. how do i find your song?

[ViTRiOL]

Originally Posted by Jason

haha, i figured with a comment w/ this much ego you must be superb or somethin so i check your audio and text battles ... lol

if i can help you achieve your goal in any way just holler tho .[COLOR="Silver"]

Bahaha, obviously I'm joking dude. You're clearly improving, I think maybe when you got into intricate scheme-heavy parts nearer the end, the words became less clear. All I was taught to stop that from happening is to "shape" the words in your mouth as you do, like, concentrate on what you do with your mouth when you say them. Sometimes it sounds a bit slurry.

Otherwise, I'm no expert. I'm more of a instrumentalist and singer-songwriter. My audio is mostly embarassing, haha. Text battles I think I can fuck with.

Last bar was crack.

[Jason]

Originally Posted by ViTRiOL

Bahaha, obviously I'm joking dude. You're clearly improving, I think maybe when you got into intricate scheme-heavy parts nearer the end, the words became less clear. All I was taught to stop that from happening is to "shape" the words in your mouth as you do, like, concentrate on what you do with your mouth when you say them. Sometimes it sounds a bit slurry.

Otherwise, I'm no expert. I'm more of a instrumentalist and singer-songwriter. My audio is mostly embarassing, haha. Text battles I think I can fuck with.

Last bar was crack.

hahaha ... you cunt

yeah i definitely agree there was a bit of slurring in parts ... i think i need to punch in / out line phil said to help w/ the breath control issues and be a little more clear .. learning process .. appreciate the feedback .. hit me up with anything you need me to check out

[ViTRiOL]

Yeah, can you delete all my audio battles please?

The more recent ones aren't that bad, but all the ones when I was actually trying to freestyle are just terrible, bahahaha.

One thing you can check out is the Tag Team battles, they are getting slept on like a bitch and I laid down some crack bars that you will appreciate. Take it easy dude.

[Jason]

i can delete them if you won .. just link me

[ViTRiOL]

Bah, fuck it then. No point having 4 audio losses just hanging there, sorta tacky.

[IV]

Originally Posted by Jason

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word i hear that .. i packed a few too many words in certain bars and i had to say em really fast to pack it all in .. came across a little forced

That was the only comment I was gonna make haha, and obviously quality but that's not really something you can control when you're just playing around with it

[FiNAL WoRD]

@Jason , yessir

it didn't sound like you were that into it, i wanna hear a hungry jason you know what i mean?pause , Your writing there no doubt and i can tell you know what your doing wrong so really the only thing i can suggest is try practicing your bars a little more, punch ins are okay but you can get a badnews biscuits feel and it can come off pretty bad.

try spitting only a portion of it a few times and do it till you finished then give it a run thru,
Its romans revenge, you gotta be a lil hyphy hahaha

thats my suggestion, but i am high

[Jason]

Originally Posted by FiNAL WoRD

@Jason , yessir

it didn't sound like you were that into it, i wanna hear a hungry jason you know what i mean?pause , Your writing there no doubt and i can tell you know what your doing wrong so really the only thing i can suggest is try practicing your bars a little more, punch ins are okay but you can get a badnews biscuits feel and it can come off pretty bad.

try spitting only a portion of it a few times and do it till you finished then give it a run thru,
Its romans revenge, you gotta be a lil hyphy hahaha

thats my suggestion, but i am high

word i think youre on point with that .. thanks for takin the time