FVC Membership Contest Round 1 (Text)

[Erupt]

I didnt see the part about one comment till after I voted.. Smh it was a short second comment tho..

[NOBLE]

Originally Posted by Erupt

I didnt see the part about one comment till after I voted.. Smh it was a short second comment tho..

Don't worry about it bro. I noticed you posted them one right after the other. I'll revise the rules a little bit for the next round.

---------- Post added at 02:13 PM ---------- Previous post was at 01:25 PM ----------

@Verity @BLNK You guys are the only ones that have yet to vote. Everyone else has voted. Verity, you have 22 hours left before your assigned battle closes. BLNK, yours closes in 1 day and 6 hours. Please vote on your battles before they close.

[Erupt]

Originally Posted by NOBLE

Don't worry about it bro. I noticed you posted them one right after the other. I'll revise the rules a little bit for the next round.

---------- Post added at 02:13 PM ---------- Previous post was at 01:25 PM ----------

@Verity @BLNK You guys are the only ones that have yet to vote. Everyone else has voted. Verity, you have 22 hours left before your assigned battle closes. BLNK, yours closes in 1 day and 6 hours. Please vote on your battles before they close.

no doubt, good shit my nig

lets get these Judged on peeps

[Teek]

Erupt Vs. Unyqe http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=442891
Erupt: FyaWurdz: 3 /*** _Lizman_: 5
Unyqe: FyaWurdz: 6 /*** _Lizman_: 7
Expo:
@FyaWurdz -
"Stay away from multis like WEAK OR TOO".. They were capped for no reason n messes up the flow." - "Mix that in with broken multies ...."
Capping ANY WORD DOES NOT MAKE IT A MULTI, nor does whether it being capped or not HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH FLOW. Neither of you picked up on his cadence and found the multi scheme. Both of you copped out saying he had broken multi's when he didn't. I found his scheme easily and almost spit it on audio just so you could hear the flow. Is it a weak verse? Yes, but it is nicely structured by him, everything flows fine and he had no broken multis in his scheme.
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@_Lizman_ - "multies that didnt work " - " U have a problem with multis aswell."
Lizman also got busted for multis. Liz had 2 minor broken multis in his verse, depending on pronunciation of HANDLING, he put an A in "Handling a steak", and had a syl difference in another bar. His flow and cadence were fine besides that.
Liz also got busted for punches and taking too long to deliver punches. Liz had a punch in every bar, and though ones like in the first bar are light, they are there.


*start verse***I Hook Worm With The Claw, No Matter The ANGLES HE TAKES,
Cause He Ain't 'Toe To Toe' To My 'Brilliance', No SANDALS AND SHADES,
Boys Put 'Sticks' In His 'Flower' Without CANDLES AND CAKES
To 'Insert Leads' And Turn This 'Dead Beat' Into A 'White Out' Like GANDALF THE GREY!!! (Flour)
You Ain't 'CLOSE' To My 'MENTAL' MAKE, No SPANDEX AND CAPES,
Cause I CLOAK YOUR DENTAL TASTE With HANDMADE WANK PASTE,
This Fag's A 'Bear' I Rip His 'Paws' Like CANCELLING BREAK
And Put The 'Blade To His Grill' Without HANDLING A STEAK!! (Clothes, Mantle)
Have Him Shook Through My Lightwork Like LANTERNS THAT SHAKE...****end verse***

Overall view:
Either neither of you bothered to 'read into' each verse, or you're not capable of doing so.

Honestly, I don't care to see anyone who can't get what the spitter is doing in FVC and don't want to give either of you a point.
It really wasn't a difficult battle to vote on. There was a clear winner and loser and even the scoring should have been fair enough.
Choice: NEITHER ONE OF YOU

[Erupt]

lol when i said took too long to get to the punch..... its exactly what i meant, his punches were weak , didnt hit at all, they werent punches, more like flicking the kid on the head, and yes LIZ's multis were forced, idk what type of accent he has but there were forced multis, also you pointed out that he had a syllable diff...... this is an 8 line battle... two messed up multis equals a problem with multis in an 8 line battle.

smh

[Reznov]

if a spot opens

pm me

[~SHINIGAMI~]

LMAO @Erupt GEEETTTTTTT UMMMMMMMMM!!!

[Revan]

Talksick & AC's Bitch both voted on:
http://www.letsbeef.com/battle_detai...n=tb&id=442519


AC's Bitch

Things i disagreed with:

"Let me start by saying you shouldnt use slashes(/) after each line. It takes up space in which you could use for more words."

I dont think that is accurate. A slash will hardly take up that much space and can be used effectively to signify the end of a certain concept, scheme or theme.

"Next, work on 'concepts/flips'"

A flip is responding to the opponents verse within your own. As Miss Cigar went first and the battle was not a personal one, how could she possibly flip?

"What these are, are lines that "make the reader think". for example.'He's shit talking, guess ive WOKEN THE INSTIGATOR, but ill spoil this beef like BROKEN REFRIGERATORS"

Dont use basic lines as an example of creative ones. Completely pointless.

"Now earlier i said your concepts were pretty good, and they are, but you lacked personals...You could have did something about the fact that he/she is a new comer.(ex.Its like you just hit puberty your a New Comer/cummer')"

I understand where your coming from but again not all battles are planned private battles, this one is clearly an open taken by an open and these types of battles will always happen. & again with the basic line example? lol Stop that shit!

"Voted: misscigar: 5 / Revan: 7"

Highly overrated both verses imo. I personally would of scored the contest as a 2-5.

Things i agreed with:

"I realize your fairly new so ill tell you as a forewarning, multi syllable rhymes are VERY effective and voters look for them in verses.U could have said 'u know im boss so i REIGN SUPREME & CAME TO REEK havok on this faggot, his middle NAME IS WEAK!(just an example). See how instead of 1 syllable rhyming i was rhyming 3 syllables together?And it sounded much nicer right?Okay"

Besides the dodgy example bar again lol, the point was accurate and helpful.

" focus on punchlines. You bragged alot about yourself (ex.I run the world).instead of talking about yourself so much, focus on clowning your opponent."

Again solid advice, and helpful for a novice to hear.


TalkSick

Things i disagreed with:

Honestly... i didnt find a damn thing wrong. Bastard.

Things i agreed with:

Again i think you honestly covered everything required of a great vote. You gave advice, produced good examples, critqued accurately and had perfect verse rating. Extremely impressed.

Holla!

[Letum]

I blame @NOBLE for giving us a Lizman battle to vote on. . . .Why not just have us translate mandarin to latin. . .

[NOBLE]

Originally Posted by Unyqe

I blame @NOBLE for giving us a Lizman battle to vote on. . . .Why not just have us translate mandarin to latin. . .

But if you're in the FVC, you're going to have all sorts of people hitting you up to drop a fair. Lizmens need love too! Lol!