One thing I'd say @Featured is that some of your multis felt a little forced to me, e.g. 'FEELIING THE BEST' and 'REAL IN THE FLESH' don't feel very natural where they are. Those two lines also had a couple of bits of wordplay (wrote 8 and personal), which didn't really seem to be relevant or to add to what you were saying.

For the most part your lines were solid, but the whole verse could have done with streamlining your set ups to make your punches that little bit crisper.

That's all I've got!

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