PLEASE RESPOND IF U HAVE A COMMENT ABOUT WHAT I WROTE
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Look, im fast at everything, so call me THE FLASH...i burn your house down till its nothing BUT ASH...fuck traveling to the future,bitch, i travel to THE PAST!! if this was a race, youd be in place LAST!!
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please post some comments...and pleas dont be hurtfull or ingnorant...be honest, but be honest nicely...

These are basic lines man, add a little more complexity to what you spit, it's sorta predictable when i'm reading along, no hate tho..

Also add multi's in there. Set it up better.. your the one who controls the execution of the line.

Try using longer multi-syllable rhyming. Flash, ash, past, and last are all one-syllabled and it sounds very simple. Instead of rhyming words like cat, bat, and rat, try rhyming cattle, battle, and rattle. It's only one more syllable but it makes a big difference.

There is no complexity, your lines have to be clever in order to be interesting.

i agree with them all....jus got to add multies and get imaginitive...keep at it though

nice replies y'all

Yea multis and double rhyming syllables would thrive...

Look, im "Fast At Everything", so call me THE FLASH..."I'll Burn Your House Down" till its nothing BUT ASH...fuck "Traveling To The Future",bitch, "I Travel To THE PAST!!" if this was "A Race", you'd be in LAST!!// <<<<If you're looking for the correct version, that is it.>>>> You didn't need the "in place" on the LAST part. It throws off the flow of the bar. As others said, it also needs a bigger vocabulary,words with many more syllables,and I know other people are saying multis...you could go with those, or you could use very clever metaphores too.