rate and advice like the other ones people
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-06 19:32:28

DUDE lol im so fuckin baked, im not readin this fuckin novel, i bet its good tho, jack u always got good shit man lol

Posted on: 2009-06-06 19:40:37

love it especially since im on it but naw good shit Jack aka Rip keep it up cuzzo
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-06 19:46:41

ya both did ya thing.. 10's up..
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-06 22:08:56

couldnt catch the flow that well wit no beat..but jus off the top..it was pretty sweet bro...directed to n e ?..8s
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-06 23:50:56

some nice story tellin shit....but the structure just wasn't all the way there for me...Love the Picturesque feeling to it though fam fa real....I give it an eight only cause the structure..and thass what makes a RHYME a RHYME ya feel me...though HIT ME WIT that COLLABO!!!!!
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-07 01:02:52

Nice, it needed some harder punches if u gonna be a punchline master, ya verses are too short too quick, draw out ya story, overall pretty nice tho, hit me up 4 a cypher anytime fam
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-07 06:13:43

Nice spits. The spit was good but the story felt too condensed and chopped up. Something like this should be layed out more dramatically so simple-minded niggas can follow more easily, LOL.
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-07 07:24:50

dymes
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-07 12:50:16

cool shit 9
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-07 14:14:53

ok..this one was good but you concept went from punchline rapper to story teller but i think for the most part you told a story the whole time thats just my opinion...this is what i would do just my opinion..for the story teller part i would make it like filled with punchlines kinda like the scripts are twisted...let the punchlines tell the story then flip it around for the punchline tell the story about him then you get the best of both worlds with a key concept...this may sound confusing soo just yell at me if you dont understand all in allgood verse i enjoyed reading it..keep up the work i enjoy it...~KY~
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-07 22:09:40

Mnkay... unusual flow
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-08 00:16:48

give tha shyt a 7....93??? again huh? ya flow needs more depth, reel talk
Rated: 7

Posted on: 2009-06-08 06:56:25

dimed man,the chorus was hot and,jacks second verse was tyte
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-08 11:40:21

10 stupid good b
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-08 13:20:51