haha beautiful man...keep up
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-03 21:54:23

sounds like a tribute (end) but a mix of poem and discussions, mixing all those three make ya text a bit hard to catch, it might be ya personal point of view about art, but, u should keep this kind of text personal, cuz people would find u too complex, just like i was...
Rated: 7

Posted on: 2009-06-03 22:04:09

a poem im i worte thinkin bout recordin it explain how you voted people
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-03 22:04:49

*wrote and thankx for the feed back it is a mixture of both
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-03 22:06:03

LOW 8 GUD SHYT
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-03 22:15:01

dont record this without tweaking it....its to poteic....to record u need to up the flow n remove some fillers....but other wise i give it a low 9...you had good concepts and ideas..but a small vocablary...i understand for a piece like this multies n metphors is not rele need but having a vocab can make this piece that muchbetta its good tho 1
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-03 22:25:43

thats why i post it these so i can improve them b'fore i record them thankx for the real feed back people
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-03 22:32:30

Nine. I like the concept and content of your spit. Words used were a lil simplistic, but you got your thoughts across real well regardless. All and All good spit, I think it would be tough to spit this over a beat, but accapella, no problem. I fucks with good poetry it comes straight from the heart and soul.
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-04 00:07:51

shit i like ya story tellin i could picture it
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-04 00:29:18

i like ya story
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-04 06:44:35

it was alright, styll im give it an high 9, its fair styll (:
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-04 07:19:24

nice
Rated: 7

Posted on: 2009-06-04 09:40:46

thats that reel new york flow ryte there, storrytellin at its highest level...10 all day nigga!!!
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-04 09:59:57

Imma hit you wit a low 9 only beause there were a lil to many fillers an the vocabulary was kinda simple....the concepts were nice but the complexity wasn't all the way there for me...thass no H8 fv vb vf VOTE BACK on my solo cypher..."Fictional Emcee"
Rated: 9

Posted on: 2009-06-04 11:43:42

dimed
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-04 13:21:59

dimein it to like the concept and the flow good shit cuzzo
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-04 18:17:15

this is what i like poetry story telling and a way to throw people off make them think then bring them back in thats the style that industry cats never have....before you record this sketch up your vocabulary and subtract a few minor errors nothing big...try to accapella this first..maybe when you record it use a slow like old orchestra instrumental that should make the concept and your point more clear...present yourself like a poet rather then a emcee on this one it should help...~KY~
Rated: 8

Posted on: 2009-06-05 00:36:43

yo das good.. but if u do rekord u gotta git more fillers and git dat flo str8..otha than dat its good homie..that shyt reel

Posted on: 2009-06-06 08:40:36

10..really deep like abyss
Rated: 10

Posted on: 2009-06-08 03:50:51