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Damn, I likes this shit. EVERYBODY on point and did their thing while sticking with the concept. J Murka, just missed it, homey, there'll be more, man.
Rated: 9
Posted on: 2009-05-21 00:29:59 
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"""Deep_Inner""" Your drop is definitely based in a struggle. It has a good structure of storyline material. It's rough, rugged and ruthless. It has supreme depth out of all the drops. Utlizin good short multi's. Concepts are definitely there cuz u wrapped ur material around em. I love the way u ended it with the last bar. ReSPeCT. I see u man. I got a series im workin on with Caesars and I'ma be blazin some joints, writin material for a deep text track within another week or 2. Would u like to contribute a verse on some real talk for mine and Caesars cypher series? I know u bro. Ur always up-2-par. Hit me up in my inbox if ur interested. My fave bars. "Life's trife, I have a better chance of fucking five dykes, than releasing an album and getting five mics, Married, I got a wife, I say, "You can whatever you like", syke, Nigga barely make ends meat, but you trying to take a bite, My anger ignites, over life's difficult times and struggles, The ones you trust enough to hug you, be the quickest ones to cut you, shit, shows how much they "love you", only hug you to smother you"......."""Killa DUB""" Hot shit man. Ur concepts are definitely portrayed in ur piece. Ur drop is similar to "Deep_Inner's" becuz it has the thuggish vibe to it. Similar in 2 ways becuz u both give a shout-out to family, and similar again because y'all ended it in a state of struggle. I found it more of a freestyle/keystyle then a written. It's a solid spit. U got good inner scheme in ur 8th bar. U have a multi in the 5th bar. And it seems like u orchestrated a hook at the end. If so..it is decent. A lotta ppl say that the hook is the hardest part of writing lyrics. I always find my hook from the last bars of my drops. U are in the right direction. My fave bars. "i struggle day and NIGHT just to feed my baby a BITE , or to have money to sit in LIGHT , out late pushin sacs to a MEAL , out on my grind done passed up a DEAL but i gotta stick wit what is REAL , feed my child even if i gotta go wit out EATTIN , you never no weather or not your partners CHEATIN, you out hustlin puttin your life on the LINE , when your girls at home bitchin like she got a SPINE , walk straight in the door like i aint got the TIME , i was out workin when my kid learned to crawl and CLIMB . the moments that i MISSED cant just be KISSED i didnt gett be around much thats why im PISSED" ......."""-Ty""" I like the way that u stressed ur concepts from the 1st line to the beginning of the 3rd line. Thats already a lethal weapon in the arsenal when u can wrap ur material around concepts. That was displayed just like "Deep_Inner's" structure. As I said to 'Killa DUB'..I feel like this was more of a freestyle/keystyle then a written. Yet is well-rounded and solid for a spit. It is similar to "Deep_Inner's" and "Killa DUB'S" drops because u give a shout-out to family. It is also similar to Deep_Inner" and "Killa DUB" becuz u conclude ur piece in the state of struggle. The flow is good. U got good small multis being utlized throughout. Good inner scheme in the 5th bar. My fave bars. "Stuck In A CELL-AND Waiting For BAIL-AND Im Like How My Life Fucked Up And I Aint Even Catch A FELON Tried To Keep Away But Trouble Bit Me In The ASS As A Youngn Getting CASH, FAST, How Long Will It LAST Nicks And Dimes Of STICKY, PICKED-ME Did That For A Year Or Two Then It HIT-ME I Gotta Job Making Minimum WAGE Not The Same But Still Getting Paid On A Different PAGE Came At The Same Time For A Year Fucking LIARS They Said I Had An 'Attendance Problem' And I Got FIRED"......."""souy hend4life""" I like ur drop becuz u broadened the whole picture of what "Deep_Inner", "-Ty" and "Killa DUB" was portraying. They painted it in a personal perspective and u sculpted your drop into more of a worldly view. This was perfect for the last drop man. And ur conclusion differs from "Deep_Inner's", "Killa DUB" and "-Ty's" ending because it sheds more light in a literal sense. I enjoy ur piece becuz of the differences rather then the similarities. It is loaded with good multis. Good concepts. Nice choice of vocab. Good flow. Here's my favorite bars. "listn real well if you aint peepin it//life is really a game and there aint no cheats in it//love the paper love the haters is how im defeatin it//pastor on some real shit when he be preachin it//the way you make up on your bed you gotta sleep in it".......EZ DyMeZ! Peace
Rated: 10
Posted on: 2009-05-23 04:07:31
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Damn, good looking Product, that was some in-depth analysis for your ass, but I respect your comments. This what Hip Hop about, FEELING, so it's good to do a cypher like this sometimes. I ain't gonna lie, my shit ain't got no real structure, it came out like that, I'm a really frustrated nigga.
Rated: 9
Posted on: 2009-05-23 11:52:05
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