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Posted on: 2012-10-03 18:56:54

GB homie this shit should make the hotlist yo. --LYRICS-- A BATTLE VET you hibernate while I CHALLENGE THE BEST// Only time you “come out/cum out” is AFTER SEX// Lemme GRAB THE PEN, I’ll break your lines down like a GRAMMATICAL CHECK// Sending RAPPERS THEY DEATH is WHAT I THRILL// Im like the Grim Reaper everything I TOUCH I KILL// Call me a waiter cuz shots ill SERVE EM OUT// Your raps are plastic when I spit fire they SURE TO MELT// Youll have nothing to waste/waist like throwing away a DIRTY BELT// I do it up right/upright im FIELD GOAL KICKING BITCHES// I put rappers/wrappers in bags I aint talking about REALLY OLD WOMEN// Raw rap killing the show yall ALL HAVE GIMMICKY FLOWS// This can get fatal like a MORTAL KOMBAT FINISHING BLOW// Yall “small minded” you cant CROSS LINES WITH A TYRANT// I’ll give you multiple endings like SAW 5 DID// Stand tall but aint AMOUNTING TO ME// Ill put you underground like that bitch in the HOUSE AT THE END OF THE STREET// You don’t like it you getting bored? My RHYMINGS EXQUISITE WHORE// Hows this even im a “Genius” (GZA), FIGHTING WITH LIQUID SWORDS!!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-03 19:12:55

Most definitely yo. Dope spitting, only line I didn't get from you is the liquid swords line but the rest was dopey. Good luck man. As you said, this should be a hotlister coz we killed this shit! AC's Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-03 19:43:46

The Liquid Swords line i was reffering to GZA from Wu-Tang Clan his nickname is the Genious and his album title was Liquid Swords. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-03 21:21:25

dope,,micce lyrics,,one took it though,,,fv Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-03 21:52:16

BOTH DID THAY THING ON THIS PROPS TO BOTH MC BUT SHOUT OUT TO MY FELLOW AC Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-03 22:21:38

Dope ma fuckers your opponent came with it fv vb Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-03 22:24:36

DMK the fuck they bin feeding ya Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-03 22:52:49

nice :D Good battle yo. This shit is type dopey Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-03 23:50:59

fv dope battle! props to both Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 00:44:26

one had more stand out lines with delivery Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 02:14:29

Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 13:38:13

Zoo was cool very simple and baby bars but your flow was cool ,DMk got that "eww that lil nigga the thruth type shit" savage in dis hoe nice E-z Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 16:46:36

Zoophagus Zedikiah: Confident delivery. "Take more losses than motherfucking tournaments" I get it. I supposes you will get a lot of losses in a tournament? People have to lose in order for others to progress. I get it. But it's far to vague and generic a reference to really hit. "Tighter than Virgin pussy" it's far more direct than the last line and more clean cut but it's really really played. If you can keep your lines as direct as that 1 and less vague as the first, think more outside the box when writing, then with your delivery, you'll be good. If it feels dated, over used or cheesy when you write it, chances are, it is. listen to more battles to get a better feel for what works and what doesn't. Then try to incorporate what you've heard when you go to write. The rest of the verse was the same. But you said 1 line. "you'll get ate like disobedient lions in the circus" I get what you were going for but the way you worded it made no sense. Circus lions don't get ATE because they're disobedient. Who eats them? Lol. Anyway you got the delivery down and kinda the right idea because even though they didn't connect, at least you're throwing punches. Just need to be more creative with your writing all while keeping it direct, you also need to proof read your verses before you submit them to iron out the creases in your wording. Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 18:10:38

DMK: you have a forced singy style delivery to me. Like a fake swagga. You kinda rush your lines as well, maybe to cram your lines into the 60 second limit. By doing this you're sacrificing cadence and personality for quantity. 8 well delivered punches will always fair better and make your verse stand out more than 10 rushed 1's. You had a lot more punches but they all suffered from tiredness. A lot of material I've either heard 10 times over or flipped better. The movie references were pretty mediocre. Nit the best most hitting penmanship but also because you rushed them. By the time the Saw 1 was finished so was the House 1. You need to slow it down a little to help your punched hit harder. But with that said, played material aside, you did land more punches and some of them were slightly above Zoops. So with that V/DMK. Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 18:24:30

Appreciate the feedback yall. Nice spar DMK. We'll rematch this in the future to give the fans something to listen to. Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-04 18:36:36

*on their spare time* (had to add that in durr) Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-04 19:31:59

ACish!!!!!!! Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-04 20:18:01

ZOO: i honestly thought you had great set ups but you lost it in the follow through. your multis were killin tho. your metahpors and punches were not as heavy as they should have been tho. you would set up for a killer punch and then your wrist would break on the connection. im honestly not talkin shit i have heard a lil better from you. your a good emcee and this should have been a much stronger verse from you. you had some filler lines that kinda watered down the lines too. you should work on the complexity of your concepts a lil more. cause fire set ups are nothing with out the fuel of the punch to keep your lines burning ya dig. and your gun talk with your set ups should have lead to much better punches as well. your mic presence was on point and your delivery was there too. you got the opener and the middle down now work on those jabs and uppercuts and you will have some beastly bars. that last bar was the best out of your whole drop... good shit................ .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... .................... ............... DMK: multis, metaphors, concepts, were off the chain, you set up, aimed and fired off. most of your punches landed, there were a couple that didnt make alot of since but i seen where you were tryin to go with them. your mic presence and delivery were nice. not much to critique on except those couple of lines that didnt really hit all that hard do to the follow through. keep doin what your doin for real.... damn good shit. i cant really even pick your best line there were a few that are just stand out to me.... FV is IN!!!! Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 22:29:52

Damn good shit!! Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-04 22:36:44

Thanks for all the constrontive criticism and votes yall, your time is appreciated..And fosho Zoo we'll have to rematch next time maybe get a lil personal o.0 Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-05 18:30:18

:eek: have you been going through my dirty clothes son? Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-05 20:01:34

DMK was a lil more lyrical but Zoo had a better flow and his punches hit harder. Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-05 21:14:48

zoo your wordplay is on point but you stretched out tha same rhyme scheme too long. it gets harder to use punches(good punches) when you use tha same rhyme scheme too long bcuz you have to word it according to tha rhyme scheme.your delivery was ok but could use more energy to emphasize certain lines(lines you think go tha hardest cuz too much screamin gets old quick) you didn't have any real punchlines and that ties back into stretching tha rhymes,punches need a setup, your last part of tha vers was best and thats because you switched tha rhymes and gave yourself more room to manuever with. you also seemed aimless like you had no real direction...basicall y, just keep your rhyme scheme to four bars unless you have something really worth adding and work on your delivery and you'll be a worthy contender...dmk...yo u're further along than zoo,you had multis,punchlines and presence.....but your delivery is off, you sound confident but akward at tha same time...but all in all tha only real advice that i feel would help you is to play with your delivery till you get it right...both of you already have multies,zoo you need to work on how you form your punches.you have all one-liners and no setups, but other than that and what i mentioned you both have great potential,it's up to you how far you take it Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-05 21:55:07

That means alot, man. Thanks Comment Only
Posted on: 2012-10-05 22:05:23

GB Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-05 23:18:29

gb Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-06 12:34:13

FV Voted: Rhifle / DMK
Posted on: 2012-10-06 17:04:53