Lil Diego, there just isn't enough content or thought even put into this. I feel like you could do a lot better, keep grinding.  Fairs in, easy.

306 bones in his body is on the danger of being CRACK<<should have said cracked instead to make it gramatically acceptable.

also dean-raid-ed (3 syllables)... and mean-while-fad-ed (4 syllables) do not match syllable wise and you do this a lot with ur multis which really screws up ur verse.

also ANAL and CANAL do not rhyme.same with THREAT and TREAT.

Diego u did not have the rhyming issues coz mostly there were no rhymes. and u did not fill up the box either. other than that ever u verse lacked any imagery or concepts. 

gong with amiz here for a better attempt.

Lil Diego: I'm guessing you're new here and that's why you wrote the way you did, but I'd advise you to fill in the box rather than write them line by line so you get more material crammed in. Basically write your verse like a series of run-on sentences, and CAPITALIZE the end rhymes so people know where your lines begin and end and how its supposed to flow. Other than that, the flow was okay but kind of fell off in the end. It can be improved by using multi-syllabic rhymes instead of only one or two.

Amiz: You filled in the box and capped your multies which should have made your verse more readable, but your poor use of English greatly impacted the coherence. On that note, it was really hard for me to vote your way despite your opponent's shortcomings. I'm voting for Lil Diego. His verse was very basic and short, but was a lot more coherent. Fairs.