Thought this was a reasonably good spar, although I think MCRattle was well below his best here and TK strung together a number of nice punches, which made him a pretty clear winner in my eyes.

TK, most of your multis weren't forced at all here which was really great. However, "king walks fluent" didn't really sound natural. Always think whether you can imagine someone saying something in a normal conversation, and I really can't imagine telling someone I "walk fluent". Your shoelaces bar here was easily BOTB, a really good punch. Try to make every bar you bring be like this one, because a lot of your stuff here felt closer to filler. You could have reworded it to make your double-meanings more clear though. If you'd said something like "even if I'm not pulling strings n in the loop" which would have made it more obvious what you meant with the votes meaning. Your multis were also off here, "knees gone useless/t's a top shoe in" is 4 syllables vs 5. Even if you aren't stressing "a", and I do see that you didn't bold or capitalise it, you have to have the # of syllables match (like you did in your closing set, where even though there were unstressed syllables the sets still had the same number).

MCRattle a lot of your multis here didn't match, and I think its because you were making them too long so it was hard for you or the reader to keep track of the matching syllables. Try shortening your rhymes, maybe 4-6 syllables, so that they flow better, and also taking time to try to fit double-meanings into your bars more to really elevate your punches.

Nice spar here gents. One impressed and seems to be elevating nicely, the other i felt was too strong overall and wins with a more consistant drop. 1/

Tongan got this with the cleaner read and harder hits. Multi usage could get cleaned up a little more but overall not a bad showing from you. Closer was your BOTB. IAmTheNme your opening set of lines was REALLY choppy due to how forced/stretched those multis were, and punchwise you didn't have much of anything hear to fight back with. I would read up on guys like Edgeworth, Seul, Shodan, Rai, and Kiwi Peewee to get a general idea of how to word a verse in a more fluent manner while writing better punchlines, cause this isn't cutting it. Fair's in.

The only line I want to expo is a double entendre....

"Cuz even "w/o my strings 'n the loops "everybody knows...Ts a TOP SHOE IN!!"

Means

1. Even without shoe laces I'm the top shoe sold.

2. Even without garnishing votes from people, I'll still win, without having "strings in the loops"

Real Talk*

God damn might be the best I've seen from my loser ( you can tell TK brought the best out of dude ) but the fluent lines from Tongan were too much here man solid verse