Both verses here had some really creative ideas, but they were both held back by a lack of structure. The reason I gave this one to DXTER instead of damreousone was because I felt he was more on-topic in attacking his opponent. damreousone's verse read much more like a cypher.

Both of you filled the box well, but there were a few ways for both of you to improve. You need to capitalise your rhyming syllables LIKE THIS, but only capitalise the syllables that rhyme (I wasn't really sure what you were doing with that DXTER). This will help you to have a clearer structure because you will be able to see the rhymes at the end of each line and check for yourself that they match up. Also try to rhyme three or more syllables at the end of each line, and make very sure they always rhyme properly. Don't be afraid to spend a lot of time working on a text verse, it can really allow you to elevate and get your best work out there.

Interesting spar here gents. Found one more impressive with the style and concepts. The fair is in. 1/

I personally think damreousone did better this time!

I saw some nice rhymes from both but the winner had the advantage.

9-4? If your gonna make a vote like that you gotta explain a lot more

Well then Dxter im giving it to damreousone becuz he first "Has the style im intrested in" second becuz i could not find a good structure from either of you meaning i had to stand on intrest instead of structure.

Dexter was at least trying to make some connections and attack his opponent. Cant say the same for dam. That was weird.

I can't even see the voters or rating right now. But these are not 9s.

DXTER - You seemed like you tried harder with this guy than you did a Veteran Member (Bnas) You actually had a few decent punches. Your Multies are really something you need to focus on. Especially when you have Vets from my days voting on your battles. Multies are a major thing in battle text. Not as important as punches but still very important.. And if you'd like i can help you with those. And CakedOut can help you better you punches.

D - You need to start from scratch bro. Start with the punches & style. Your style now is like a written verse song a regular song. You had no basic punches or multies. No metas. It was just - Your basic song verse. If you'd like help with Multies you can hit me up. And if you need help with Punches you can hit CakedOut up. It wasn't horrible. But it could use some help.

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