nice one cooldude, i wish i was as good as you. :0)

thanks this is your best posted verse yet so well done :D

Jazzy - It wasn't a great verse but it wasn't horrible. People on here vote based on multies, punches, concept etc.. If it doesn't have an interesting "look" most won't even read it. In other words you want it to stand out and pull people in. Then start working on punches and when you get comfortable with those add a few multies, and so on.

Dude - I like the flow it was an easy read, not too technical and i liked the lyrical old school style. But at the same time you as well need to work on the following. Multies first, because i see your good with rhyming so try adding more than just a one word rhyme. Try 2 then so on. Your punches are actually not too bad because of your style. Overall it was a okay battle. FV In Fellahs

look really dudes much the same talent but what did it for me and i gotta be honest is soon as i heard the lord was prescent fuck that sorry fam but thats enough for a loss both poor and weak and could use structure and work towards some insulting hard cutting material thats original and bom as hell BSA

k atheist u kinda treating lord like its the n word but k.

im grading this on a curve, wasn't really any horrocore bars in the first verse some ok rhymes could use alot more imagery to what youre saying. second verse was iight had better rhymes a little bit more clever just try to develop your style a little more