Noir your verse in general was solid enough but just a bit messy and could do with a bit of a focus on being clearer. For instance with the opener seemed like it had a broken multi, with "turned towards the spoon (5)/serve torture wounds (4)/first quarter moon (4)". I realised what you probably meant was "turned t'wards the spoon" which would have made it much clearer how you were pronouncing "towards" with 1 syllable, and I gave you the benefit of the doubt on this, but it's little things like that which can mess up the flow of the verse in the reader's mind.

M11STRYKER you had some creative ideas going on here but you were just lacking in execution and clear rhyming. Your rhymes could be quite repetitive, i.e. using "you" over and over again. Try to CAPITALISE your rhymes like Noir did here, it makes them clearer and easier to follow for the reader and it should also make them stand out more to you so that you can identify if you're being repetitive.

Imma feel that in the morning :(

stryker u had a few ideas but it seems like ur currently struggling to get yourself into the right train of thought to be able to make them come off as insulting coherently while Noir was leagues ahead throughout in the battle but i do admire ur will to take his open though, you should study Noir's verse in depth to understand what ur missing here. BOTB - 

Them "White-Cherrios" made ya "Life-Cereal" when u "TURNED TOWARDS THE SPOON!" u deSERVE TORTURE WOUNDS I'll jab-a-blade-in-em n have "Half Ya Face Missing" like a FIRST QUARTER MOON!!

M11 - atleast your trying bro. Thats what counts. And in all honesty your getting better. just start off with punches and work your way up bro. Noir it was okay, Didn't actually grasp the first line about the cereal thing, but the rest was enough to claim victory. FV In Yall