Ignore them South lol. Welcome to Letsbeef. We dont use line breaks so make sure you fill up the box to get the most used from the space available. 

TheDeterminator got this one with the more advanced concepts and rhyming, as well as actually filling the whole box versus maybe half.

SonoftheSouth's verse was basically written in poem format that's inadequate for battle rap but would be rather better in a slam poetry setting. So in this case it just doesn't cut it here. Also, multi-syllable incorporation was almost non-present; extend the syllables of your rhymes next time to at least three syllables and makes your lines so that 1. they connect with each other to incorporate double meaning and 2. so that it mocks/humiliates/damages your opponent more. Look up how to use metaphors in punchlines. 

The way TheDeterminator set up his verse was formatted alright. A lot more appropriate for battle rap than his opponent's. The responder also made much better attemps at connecting his lines into hard-hitting bars which damaged his opponet more. Multi-game here was axiomatically stronger as well. 

SON, you got to fill the box first of all, 2nd it wasn't horrible but it was an attention keeper... 0 style, 2 punches, 0 metas, 0 Multies, decent flow. Keep doing it bro you'll get better. Determinator, This is better than what i have seen from you, Your punches are improved, i seen a few metas thrown in, Multies was a little broken but still grasped the concept. "overall" 5-8 FV in fellahs

Why send 16 in a 32? don't disrespect the craft!

Det: glad you showed this kid how it's done run it again!

skipping lines made you weak infront of the determinator . But i see a lot potential in you. I càn give u more if it wasnt skipped. Do better next time

Appriciate the feed back new to this platform next time ill fill the whole box didnt wanna clutter it 💯 but im a little confused on the feedback im pretty sure almost every line was a multi and alotta doubles in there but 🤷 oh well 

🤔 and in no way was i disrespecting the craft... This my forst text battle in general and first battle here.. Was a learning experience

thanks for the votes guys, and i thought Son's verse was dope and very poetic he got potential....alot of the stuff i did in my verse was on a more comedic level of where i was tryna go at here. like da "asshole didnt did a 32 but didnt fill da box" it was meant to be on a laughter ting u know what im sayin. but GB and GL Son. 

Determinator took it. Neither was what i would call great. S.o.S brother you gotta fill the bars man you will lose 50% of votes by not doing so. I get you haven't been here long but a heads up. Also a lot of your rhymes were 2 syllables which is a lower number to carry into a battle. Determjnator you gotta learn to only cap the rhyming parts in your multis and not break them. "redneck just wrote" 4 syllables, "THE BESTEST DUMB JOKE" 5 syllables and was a stretch rhyme. Avoid more of this and you will get there.

Zezmer ya I wasnt intentionlly capping 'The' im using a tablet sometime s it autocaps.

Even though one lacked any structural strength, it was still not a bad attempt being ones first battle here. I would suggest building your punches with set ups and staying on scheme through the buildup. See a lot of potential in one. Wordplay can be dope if done correctly but the sun/son is pretty played out on this site. The other had a few unique ideas. Some were executed smoothly while others fell flat at the end of the buildup seemed out of sorts at times. Tough voting decision. Feel one had the better attempt and buildups to fit his verse. Good luck to both. 

Appriciate everyone for the feedback 💯 def learned a good bit about this battle format and will try to make sure i fill the box better and come with deeper multis and better set up 🤙 anyone have a suggestion for someone to battle would be dope alot easier to wrote towards somone than to write randomly