Hello dudes. My first rap was terrible, but this one even better! 

3 and 1/2 bars in flamma had this one. Mickey you need to learn to set up some multi syllable rhymes and ties in between lines. I would read flammas open as a good example to a lot of that. The tie ins were there could have upped some syllable but definitely didn't need to to tale the win. Fairs in.

huh?

Flamma had multis, a better read and punches while Mickey was just rhyming things together, but good shit both and keep it up Mickey, you'll improve man

mickey, currently you are only managing to rhyme your lines with very basic single syllable words and without any or much creativity in them in terms of punchlines, catchphrasesor conceptual flips which is really hurting you're chances of winning battles here, i did suggest you resort to studying instead of just reading the kinda verse the respected battlers post here and even learn from ur opponents verse here which was way more crisp structurally with flawless multis the punches could have better though but were way more than enough for the win here.