Good bars and good luck. 

Illaa stuck with a consistent syllable count through the entire verse. Red switched around and lead to a couple of weak points. That being said illaas finish could have been less of a stretch and been better. Fairs in

Illa: not a bad drop at all. The entire piece leading to the Radicals Foghting was actually a waste of space. What I mean by that js, it was all self hype and filler. That was space you could have used to attack your opponent. So you spent a good portion of your box on big’n yourself up. The punch itself wasn’t too strong either. Cocdeotually? Good but execution wasn’t there (imo). The rounds crashing in space - planets colliding, half played half fresh. You ending bar was your best. Good concept and I feel you executed it well. 

Overll: you’re certainly on the right track, dude. Keep battling and you’ll be flying in no time. 

Red: Opening: first line has nothing to do with the punchline. As well as the punchline concept is played (imo). The next bar was promising, nice concept, slightly played but you made it work... indo feel however that there should of been a third line on this bar, the first two feel like a dope set up to a haymaker punch...but it wasn’t there. Next bar, maybe I’m missing something? But how can a gun be packed with a droid? Again another played an also weak punch with the vampire teeth. Your ending bar was good. 

Overall: I have seen far better from you. Maybe you were as focused for this one cause it was blind and you decided to go lite on the new account? 

I feel Illa took this one, lads. Fairs in, I’m out. 

if i'm not mistake, this one if the verses illaa bit. vote goes to red baron for writing his own piece......