Had to give this to Dyno, much stronger punches and good multis...although, they could have been tighter...try not adding so many commas in your scheme...it destroys the fluidity and takes away from the potency of your punch. Hoax, good flow and good structure...but you have to start experimenting with your multis, setups and building creative punches...disses and insults only take you so far. Overall, good battle and a good read.

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Dynoswordz, this read to me mostly as just rhyming, with little to no attempt at a structured punchline, and that takes a lot of impact away from the verse. And while there was an attempt at wordplay here, it's important to make sure that wordplay works grammatically in both forms. What is a siris of events, exactly? It's nonsensical, that's what. Lol. I understand that the homonym here is "series," but, because it doesn't read both ways it comes off as seeming forced, and ineffectual. TheHoax, honestly man, you need to do a LOT of work. This was a very, very basic verse, with no punches, little to no concepts, and just didn't seem at all rap battle oriented.