I want to stress that these ratings, to me, are reflective of the aspects of BATTLE rap selected, and are no way criticisms of your ability to rap, or your understanding of the genre of hip-hop. KingVA, you have an OKAY understanding of multisyllabic rhyming. There were examples of this sprinkled throughout your verse. But, there were also a lot of examples of fewer syllables rhyming, because of the brokenness of some of the attempts at multis. An example of this would be "helipad stand" and "feel the backhand." While pad stand, and backhand rhyme Heli, and feel the have much, much different vowel sounds, and because this is a written format don't translate as well in regard to rhyming. And the same can be said about punchlines. You have a slight, VERY slight understanding of these in concept. But, they're very basic from the examples shown here. "You won't raise flame as a bic igniter." While this does, to a degree, constitute a punchline, it lacks the creativity, and complexity that people prioritize in battle rap. Sinacog, first and foremost, you should be sure that you're directing the majority of your verse at your opponent. And while you had one, or two examples of multisyllabic rhyming, for the most part it wasn't something that was utilized in the verse. The same with punchlines. Because it seems like you may be just starting out in battle rap, I would suggest watching some live battlers' material, or reading the material of some of the better battlers on the site to familiarize yourself with the expected standards. I chose my winner because he was more directed at his opponent, and showed a stronger(albeit still in need of work) understanding of the fundamentals of writing battle raps. 

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Hmm.. I usually rap out loud and then write it.. You may have a point.... But ummm... Battle me..  Send me a verse.. I really wanna see some lines from you ... It only take a couple minutes for 4 bars and it'll help me get better.... What. You. Think.

My fair vote is tossed one didn't even seem.like a battle verse to imo and the other was more well.rounded here easy win tbh

One had the better wordplay while the other made a decent attempt but couldn't hang with his opponent when the shots really mattered yo. Fairs in and keep grinding to both dudes yo