Dayum My First Text Battle Since 2011. I Have Missed This!

Welcome back. Respect, your flow is good.

Thanks Adem, Keep Dropping Battles Fam Always Improve, Even For Me - Double R

insane multisyllables on rhyme reaper's end

fv! ku

Adem - you got the structure and rhymes down to the expectations what you gotta work on is to give more relevancy and meaning to your punchlines now to make them work. Let longer multis come gradually to your writing.

Rhyme REaper - hope you stay after this verse man and welcome back!! the gaddafi(he was a general tho) and crash dummy test were nice references and the BOTB for me.

Thanks for the breakdown always appreicated but Muammar Mohammed Abu Minyar Gaddafi, commonly known as Colonel Gaddafi aka wikipedia. Was his nickname from the revolutionary days.

via Wiki sorry

Adem this was much better man. Nice to see you fill the box this time. Your choice of vocab is great, your content.. interesting. I have nothing against the weirdo gay bars they make me laugh, but your verse does read more like a cypher than a battle. Definitely an improvement tho.

Rhyme Reaper yours was for sure more like a proper battle verse. Some concepts a bit unoriginal or simple (e.g. crime scene), but some cool punches here like crash test dummy. Seeing as i feel like gay bars are fair game for this battle, your prison bar was actually mad dope, respect. Be careful with using words just to fit a rhyme scheme though, e.g. disgraced oddly is a mad unnatural phrase that throws the line off. Overall this is great shit. 

Fairs in. Squammy.

Alright thanks saxx and squam I’ll work on it. It’s 2k19 so I’d want to come out as cooler and doper. But it’s a battle so yes i need to change few things. 

Fv nh 

Better multis