Bruh I kinda expected better from #1 this month

Cakedout won this one easily

death race -- Sylvester stal

Death race ---- Stallone first movie

Seals vest a cat-- Sylvester the cat

Bore -- boar

Right in-- writing. 

Ah swoop pen ;)-- ass whooping

Cakedout, you had some solid concepts, but, I feel like you stretched the King of The Hill punch a bit too far for an 8 line battle. With a longer style set up that would work more for a longer line battle. And that made some of the verse lose some steam to me. KingVA you have a solid understanding of the basics. But, feel that some of your punches come off as seeming ineffectual because of how simplistic they are overall, despite having good ideas.

To elaborate further, by simplicity, I mean in regard to the execution of the punchlines. Using similes as the basis for the punchline, as an example. And in regard to some of the sloppier rhyming, as well. The set ups are there, but the execution feels basic.

mighty impressive this battle.

majorly coz king came off as a pleasant surprise! liked his wordplays and creative efforts. what you let you down was the wording of your lines and which sometimes lead to incorrect grammar too and kinda fell flat coz of it, had u done that right u would have won this easy esp with those sorta concepts.

somebody get this dude on discord man!

Cakedout got this fairly through the better wording which led to more natural and complete sounding bars which were not all conceptually strong but atleast made the journey from raw conceptualization to a fitting execution.

My loser had a decent verse by all means, and I would like to say that I see his improvment on his battling skills. He brought a more solid verse this time, and his lines are starting to make more of an impact. Metaphore and wordplay attempts, which is good, but the quality of them wasn't top notch or came off as "too creative" because i've heard a couple before. Formatting (Constructing ur verse to where it's looking clean and acceptable to readers giving the readers as less mistakes as possible so it's important to proof read and make corrections when needed) This should be his next agenda. Our winner took this with his battling experiance, Having an edge with more accurate formatting and knowing how to properly set up his punch. Don't get me wrong, his verse wasn't THAT MUCH better, but the experiance does show. But, this battle was closer than expected.

[Advanced Ratings] 

KingVA

Metaphores: you had some metaphores i've heard before, i will atleast give u points for trying to be creative and I did like the expandables/splitting ribs line. 5

Multies: you have some broken multies in here but, I feel if you got use to the formatting it would no longer be an issue for you. word bending capabilities seem fine just need to be more accurate. 5

Punchlines: Rambo line was my favorite bar of the battle. Your opener could have been more creative and you failed to have hard impact within some of the punches and setups. 5

Vocabulary: not bad, everything here was prefectly readable except for some of the failed wordplay attempts. 5

Wordplay: you had some wordplay attempts that were played for me, and its pretty risking when using WP because you don't want to throw off the reader so, its important to be as precise as possible. (I don't use much WP unless I know its something completly new and can tie into the concept somehow and it must roll off the tounge well for the readers). 5

Cakedout

Metaphores: the bobby and hank bar was nicely done despite the simplicity it fit where it needed to be and so did most of the content in your verse. 6

Multies: everything was on point and rhymed well from point a to point b, for the most part. 6

Punchlines: was strong enough for the W. Hank/Bobby line was probably 2nd best bar of the battle. 6

Vocabulary: nothing special but perfectly acceptable choice of vocab. 6

Wordplay: little to no WP used, but WP isn't necessarily essential to win a battle. Keeping this rate at a default. 5

Clear winner hear with good punches and set ups

I felt 1 did better with the puttin' words thatvrhymed more then his opp, as well as had better execution on his punches...GL both

No H8, FV in