LBT Undercard Match, Kiwi Peewee vs Rai

Also a 100 credit wager

Good luck Rai!

Expo:

First bar is about toilet paper (loo roll).

Steven Irwin was an Australian guy famous for being able to handle and deal with crocodiles and other big reptiles (he had a show called The Crocodile Hunter); he died when a ray(/Rai) stabbed him in the chest with its barbs and killed him.

Third bar is all about lego (getting a lego "set up" etc).

Closer: "stands out when he has vets in the scope" as in he claims hes killing LB vets exceptionally well/hes standing out in the garden looking at his elderly veteran neighbours through the scope of his binoculars, bush as in hedge/pubes.

Hope this helps, dope bars Rai btw

voting on this shortly

yo!! imma need expos from both coz i wanna double check a few things.

Manifold is part of an exhaust pipe. Tweak it as in methed up or coke out, and tweak it as in, dial it in. Ice and speed are slang words for meth. Kiwi often does math equations in his votes. You use beacons, heat, and SUDAPHEDRINE (cough meds) to make said meth and it is a dangerous formula that could blow up in your face. The shit gets you tweaking after being up for days, even weeks at a time.

M-1 is a machine gun that has turbines. Also turbines on a jet/plane wing.

Rai attacked more.. 

Both verses was great.. One of the better battles I seen this week. Kiwi had great multies thru out which was pretty cool rai jus had one or two punches that was more appealing

My vote. Rai

Fine match here with heat from both sides LT always lines well my favorite from him is the steven irwin line thats the freshest spin on that concept i've seen in awhile plus its a name flip great work there. Rai is just a beast w/the schemes the way he works it is top notch everytime he had botb with "coz "that formula could blow up in ya face" like when "inGREDIENT'S ARE SET & APPLIED in a BEACON FOR YA METH WHEN COMBINED with HEAT & SUDAPHEDRINE SUPPLY!!!!"🔥🔥🔥🔥 thanks for the read fellas im rollin wit Rai on this due to better structure and heavier punches awesome job guy my fair is in RESPECT💯

Thanks for the expos guys!

I asked for them coz i found both ur verses were pretty boring to begin with honestly, now with the expos i still feel the same coz both were over thinking their bars clearly and they came off as way too nerdy-ish and that each bar was pretty damn long didn't help either.

both had really nice personals, but in short this was supposed to be a war movie and i felt like a was watching new about the war instead.

Lil Talent -

+personals+The Steve Irwin Line+ Multis+his toys were meant for kids had me LMAOin- wording (a brick of lego against the usually said lego brick is what fucked up that punch)- set ups ( a lot of ur concepts are actly dope but gets let down by either ur execution or set up in this verse tho it was the set ups)- the close was a perfect example the above point

Rai -

+personals+multis+the fall out line-the set ups were just too long and complicated i mean i had to go back to ther previous line after reading every line and the fact that the multis were so long with technical wordplays which made life pretty difficult.

honestly this is a really bad surprise for me esp from Rai. One was weak technically the other conceptually. honestly it's just a matter of preference this battle and imma lean with talent here.

I felt my winner had more heavy hits in this 1 and that's what edges this battle...

No H8, FV in GL both

KP, if someone told me that your verse was a deliberate attempt to write extremely clever punchlines and then ruin them by fatally flawing their execution, I'd probably believe them. Every single punch in your verse was good. Your opener hooked me with the "on a roll with the paper" setup because I knew exactly where it was going, and yet it was clever at the same time, making me wish I'd thought of it first. And then we had the multi "LOO ROLL, SAT ON CRAPPERS." This is totally unnatural. Nobody would ever say that in a real sentence in normal conversation. Nobody refers to Steve Irwin as Steven, either, even though I guess that's technically his name. In the next bar, you dropped two separate multi sets, which isn't necessarily bad, but here they were so spaced apart that it was hard to follow the rhyming. Also, I've never heard anyone refer to a LEGO brick as a brick of Lego. The final bar had a ridiculously contrived setup and took up a ridiculously long chunk of text between the second setup multi and the 'punchline' - nearly 2 whole lines. If the fuck-ups in execution were in a normal mediocre verse by some trash battler with no creative vision, I wouldn't have criticized it at length like I just did, but seeing these kind of FUBARs from someone as talented as you compels me to do what I can to make sure it doesn't happen again.

Rai - first bar had a bunch of 'moving pieces' which I don't think you managed to synchronize perfectly, in that I had to read the bar twice and also look at your expo to understand what was going on. I think you managed to outsmart yourself in writing this one. Also, the third multi was broken. Really, bro? The next bar was alright, although SUDAPHEDRINE didn't quite jibe with the multi set and anyone with half of a functioning brain could see where the punchline was headed from a mile away. The Jekyll (not Jeckel, Jekyll) & Hyde concept was so obvious that it hurt. Next bar was a total reach. I think you were talking about the bleachers, like in a sports stadium, but who tf calls those just 'bleach?' And hitting your head on a light doesn't make something a 'bright idea' - I can see the semantic connections there, but that doesn't mean the concept isn't a shoulder-snapper. With the closer, you might have actually gotten your facts straight, but when almost anyone hears "M-1" with reference to military equipment, they are going to think of 1 of these 3 things: the M1 carbine that the US military used in Korea, the M1 flamethrower from Vietnam, and the M1 Thompson submachine gun. Whatever you're talking about isn't a well-known thing. I kind of wanted to like the concept, but again, it was so obvious that it hurts.

Overall, this battle was a match between great concepts and screwed up execution versus self-writing but decent concepts with very up-and-down execution. In most cases, I lean towards good concepts over good execution, but in this case, Kiwi Peewee's execution was so severely and consistently awful that I can't in good conscience give him my vote here. Good luck to both battlers. Fair's in.

it's a close one

okay battle fv

good battle I think one was all around better here my fair Is tossed fellas