Loser didn't try hard enough it was just simple diss a person type 8 lines

savage I really liked that closer because I understand the sentiment, but bone daddy just said he'd give you the D and draw dicks on your face so I gotta give him the vote

^ This guy gets it.

cant hate sharpie line was fire!! goodshit!

Bone daddy was funny. Had some good bars. Savage didnt rhyme too good but his  I M bar was actually nice.

Nice battle. Liked the comedic twists Bone Daddy brought, but I don’t think this verse was on par with some of his other battles.

Bone Daddy gets my vote here, since not only did he bring proper punchline format Andy multi’s, but he also brought... one... punchline that was above average which was his Dick on his face. But yeah, Bone Daddy also had the multi style I prefer, keeping it short and not 10 words long. Savage didn’t have any of the above, lacking in multi’s, punchlines and anything that hit hard. However both seemed to get a lack of... inspiration... and I’ll get into why for one opponent in particular, later.

Savage, I don’t know what to say that I haven’t already said before. I couldn’t spot an entire punchline in your verse, and the only legible diss was Lets be friends, insulting transgender people, and saying mods ask for head on “treads”, a long with a few other things that were really small and not really worth even pointing out. Your verse rarely rhymed too which was really odd. Here, I’ll leave each legible rhyme scheme below

Dope Flows - Dojo

Be friends - I Am

Fight-Light-Sike-Right

As you can see there are only two schemes which contain multi’s. Savage, rapper to rapper, you really need to up your game if you’re gonna win over an established battler. You simply cannot beat a rapper like Lockhart, All-Boro or Guts If you keep using one word rhyme schemes, especially if those words are only one to two syllables. A possible exception to the one word being part of an acceptable scheme, would be a single long word with 5+ (preferably more) such as Methamphetamines   Or Lexicographically, since you can easily pair it up with a 3-5 word scheme. The easiest way to build on this skill is to make rhyming phrases off the top of your head, and then form them together and connect them into a cypher. For example (yeah these have no relation to each other, but making rhyming phrases in your head WILL help):

Green apples and oranges

Three Crackles and Door Hinges

Tree Ravels with Sores n Shit

Another huge hole in your game is a lack of punchlines. A punchline has to have a defined set-up, and finish. The set-up consists of all the elements you need to set-up the punch itself, which is the hard hitting insult which uses the momentum and information gathered and presented from the earlier set-up to deliver a hit to your opponent. The punch needs to remain relevant to your punchline, and by this, I mean the information that’s included in your set-up needs to be relevant to your finishing punch. So for example, you can’t make a set-up talking about a celebrity quote, and have he punch relating to a type of dog breed (unless you have some sort of wizardry to connect the two), as the two most likely have no fucking connection to each other. Also make sure your final punch isn’t selfhype either, and at most use self hype if it’s relevant in your set-up.

Other than that, everything else will come with experience. So jus’ keep on elevating.

Bone. I ain’t got nothing to say to you, other than Decent verse, and that I know you know your shit better than I know mine so i know you can write a better verse. 

But... you kinda bit... whether intentional or not, the punchline you dropped against Chekkit was nearly identical to this one.

”Rounds leaves ya bloody an' CLUTCHIN' YA CHEST til' I fuck tha bullethole an' pop another shot off, leavin' it all STUCK IN YA BREAST” This ones against Chekkit

“I’ll have him catching more than an L if this MOTHERFUCKER’LL DISS ME, he’ll be clutching his chest when the ROUNDS hit like this FUCKER’S HUGGING A FRISBEE”.

what are some clear differences?

1. The second punchline seems to be more focused on the frisbee

2. Different rhyme schemes

3. Different arrangement

What are some clear similarities?

1. Both are “rounds” concept bars

2. Both have the exact same wording of “clutching his chest”

Take with this what you will. But, I’ll keep my opinions to myself, and will only leave you with the evidence.

To be frank, Both lacked in quantity and quality of punches but Brayne atleast brought solid structure to his verse, better rhyming, and had some good entertainment value to his lines and so won it for me here.