Both could use some structure. A better use of concepts and punches would be nice fv 

ifvotes goes to savage just for having the bare minimum requirements of a complete battle verse. bugs you just need some more experience writing and maybe checking out other battlers verses on here would help cuz you need to work on wordplay and metaphors big time.

savage u need to take more time and gather ur thoughts when u writing a verse u dont need to set a timer for 20 minutes and whatever u have at the end is what u must send lol cuz u just rushed every good idea u had. sit there if you have a good punchline think of all the ways you can set that line up with little filler multis, it seems to me ur just writing a long stumble on an idea randomly and then move on, u need to prioritize your best ideas and structure ur verse around that. ALSO where u place your CAPS in your verse is all wrong. only capitalize what youre actually trying to rhyme, if you're trying to emphasize wordplay maybe "try" putting those bits in "quotations" and then CAPITALIZE THE MULTI AT THE END.