I gave this one to Mizz Ammo because I felt her multies were cleaner and clearer, and she had some better concepts.

Mizz Ammo I particularly liked your opening scheme, and thought your Mary Queen of Scots line was botb. In order to elevate, work on improving the length and complexity of your multies; "guessed u can bet thoughts/-pressed by my next plot" was a good length for a multi but non of your other schemes were that long. 3 syllables should be a bare minimum, preferably four or more.

Hallow you are definitely improving so don't be disheartened, but it wasn't enough to win here. I didn't really get what was going on for much of your verse because it was unclear and unstructured. I'm pretty sure you'll have already heard that you should capitalise your multies like Mizz Ammo did here. Alongside that, I'm going to go out on a limb and give you advice I don't normally give people. Try to have 8 lines in your verse; don't put line breaks after them but put a "/" after each one and make sure there's a multi-syllable rhyme at the end of each line. This will give you a very basic but readable structure, and you can work on improving it from here. That's just my advice, feel free to take it or leave it.

gb and gl bro

#savage

Mizz ammo had sum nice setups 

Gb 

Just liked one more