Kriid I think this is the best verse I've seen you drop, you're really elevating well. That being said, there were a few flaws, a few stretched multies and a few stale lines. Ginge on the other hand had a couple of haymakers, and a large section of his verse flowed and rhymed phenomenally although lacked outstanding punches.

Kriid I'm going to talk about your lowlights here because I think that's the best way to help you improve, but I want to make clear at the start that this was a good verse. I thought your Pokémon opener was great, and maybe the best bar I've ever seen you drop. That being said, a number of your other punches didn't work as well. Sometimes, your concepts were just stale or weak. For instance, your 'schoolboy record/spinning in elementary' punch used one of the oldest ideas in the book (spinning like a record) and really didn't take it far. Other times, your multies were clearly just there to match syllables, like "distant cedar plumbing". Plumbing was the only word there that actually had anything to do with the punch, you should have either used a more complex concept or totally reworded the punch so that you weren't adding in obviously irrelevant details just to fill up multies. Your "DNA/dicks n aids" line was a lowlight for me, it was just such a long and specific set-up and the punchline "dicks n aids as an acronym spells DNA!" didn't really do anything for me. As I've said your best bar was your opener, try to continue concepts setting up a punch across multiple lines to build to a strong punch like that instead of doing 1 line per punch.

Ginge your multies were consistent and rarely forced and unnecessary. I thought your hangman punch was botb, the "cock-a-too" one was classic Ginge and also made me laugh so I thought that was another great line. The last half of your verse packed in so many multies so fast that I thought it would have shredded just about anyone in audio, although text-wise I think you suffered a little from it in that it stopped you from developing more haymakers like at the start of your verse.

Regardless, thanks for two enjoyable reads, and good luck in the LBT!

Ok battle here. I got Ginge with the more entertaining punches and the better flow in his bars. Blanket/Michael Jackson line was BOTB for me. You had some punches that I felt were duds, but a solid performance overall. You've got a good knack of keeping your bars straight to the point, which is where I think Kriid lost this one because it felt Kriid had so much space between his rhymes that didn't have much variety outside of his punches, and the punches themselves weren't strong enough to justify that style of writing. Kriid had a Black Book-style verse here with a lot of space taken up between the setups and the punches, but the punches for the most part were not potent enough. Your Pokémon punch was your best one even if the rhyming is sorta iffy, but talking about stuff like DISTANT CEDAR PLUMBING? Like what even is that? That's a Danny Tanner type of rhyme right there. Doesn't make sense at all, imo. You've got potential to succeed, but it's mistakes like these that you've got to correct to make the strides you want to make.

Expo: Ash is a character from Pokémon. When you catch your first Pokémon you put two poke balls in your pocket, pocket is below the belt, also testicles exist. Wordplay for tranny’s in Indiana (the city) or booby traps with Indiana Jones, and the bolder traps have hooks attached to something above them and onto the rock itself, which is why when it gets slashed the boulder rolls. Spitting out flaming sambuca shots would most likely set a bar on fire, self explanatory. Igneous and sedimentary are rock types. A record is left spinning, schoolboys are in elementary school. Erect/Statue Erect/Penis. Jews were gassed in a small room (chamber), a closet is a small room. Coming/Cumming. When a pipe (plumbing) bursts, it spews shit water everywhere. DNA DicksNAids. Flash Is a game engine, flash games are also easy af.

This is for LBT btw

soz only just logged on 1st time in a week, ill get 2 dis in da nex cupple days

got this for more creative punches tho a few simple punches came from both. keep escalating those ideas guys. fairs in

I've got Ginge winning with a verse that won on punches, but more than that, was simply more readable, entertaining, and "fluent." Kriid did his thing but couldn't quite keep up with his opponent's pace here, despite a few good hits. Fair's in.

This was really close im.giving it to the more smoother bars and a little.bit better punches close battle fellas my fair is tossed!

good battle from both I liked the winners punches/multis better, some of kriids stuff wasnt as clear to me as ginge

Winner was flawless to somebody degree man. Mean concepts ah few jabs . Heavy bag shoots everywhere. Dept and structure was on point . Loser had so good line but was no match at all for the level the winner was on . Fv in

Winner had more consistent punches and multis lined up, a more solid read. Opponent had pretty fresh concepts, yet was lacking in execution. Pretty solid matchup, good battle gentlemen. FV