Some light practice for PYW 3 💪

EOA BITCHES

i had a few washed up puns i ended up writing for eastes but then changed my mind so i wanted to post them as an open until i saw yours so posted it here lol

meant to say wouldn't be streaking*

Cool

Good luck killa

good luck to you too fam we should do more of this on discord nah i mean? we could work on imagery and multis together by exchanging throwaway keystyles :p

Damn typo -day is supposed dat lol I keyed this up fast

Cool I'm always jotting down ideas

wrath was better forsure,

the washed up first line was fire but u kept going with the washed up concept and it sounded alil too repetitive(washedup) altho the harbor japan bomb lines was fire as fuc 

Adolf ur shit was cool but just dont try to hard

Adolf Spitter had one decent punch (closer) that was still played, and all the other punches were mediocre at the absolute best. The rhyming here was totally fucked, either truly broken (mismatching syllable counts) or with vowel sounds that didn't line up. Wrathchild was better in terms of rhyming, and although his punches didn't really resonate with me, they were enough to eke out a win. Both could do to shore up their writing. Fair's in.

#AS 4 the win!

Eh throwaway bars anyways had toss em some where if you win congrats fam

Adolf: your opener has a lot of filler at the start man. Try to keep anything u say isolated to a punch or your next punches setup. Ok 1sr punch. RV line was dope, execution could’ve been better.  The bar didn’t have room to breath or be properly setup. I’d get rid of the (basic) pamper jab next time. If you gotta choose between setting up a great punch or throwing a basic Jab choose the first option. Now you closer was CRACK. I want to see more of that. Main problem I see with you are setups and letting you multis control them too much. Finding rhymes might be hard but always make sure your multis serve what your saying in your punch overall. Good shit

Wrath: honestly not much to say. Your punches felt basic and you repeated a couple concepts with little variation. You need a bit more complexity in terms of punchlines.

To you both: Check out guys like RULE, UNKNOWN ARTIST, and DaDDiO. A lot of potential between you guys. Keep battling, fairs in. High rates for hotlist

Close battle. fv

Amazing battle.It was a close battle but wrathchild managed to edge adolf just by a bit here.Adolf was amazing in the punchline zone but wrathchild seemed to have the better structured verses and use of vocab and multies for me personally so he wins here for me.

Literally only voting Anime kid because I could kinda follow what he was saying

WrathChild needs some more work, I see where he was trying to go with his washed up rhyme scheme but it dragged too long with no punch packing to end it 

Great battle, my brethren. I happen to believe that Adolf is of the better writing quality within this test of skill between to accomplished MC's. I happened to like his Pampers line the best. Wrathchild really impressed me with the turds punch, as well. Incredible battle, my brethren. You both showed the finesse quite well.

Both almost even but one was more structured in terms of complexity and more favorable set ups, good battle 

CLOSE TO CALL ACTUALLY.  FAV PART FROM ADOLF WAS THA ''MATH QUIZZES'' CLOSER, FAV FROM WRATH WAS THA ''NICE N NEAT WASHED UP'' PART...... HAD A FEW ISSUES WITH BOTH THO, ADOLFS WORDIN SOMETIMES DIDNT MAKE GRAMMATICAL SENSE LIKE THA ''TALKIN ALL DAY SHIT, HUH'' AND ''HOPE YOU PUT EVERYTHING OWN ON WILLS'' PARTS, I DID LIKE YOUR ''PAMPERS'' LINE BUT FELT YOU COULD HAVE EXPANDED ON THA MORE AS IT WAS TOO SHORT AN NOT AS EFFECTIVE AS IT COULD HAVE BEEN....... WRATH I DIDNT LIKE HOW YOU USED ''WASHED UP'' TWICE.  ALSO THA ''HE WOULDNT BE ON A STREAKIN IN THIS'' WP DIDNT WORK BOTH WAYS, WOULD HAVE BEEN BETTER IF YOU WROTE IT LIKE ''HE WOULDNT BE ON A STREAK IN THIS'' AS THAT WOULD HAVE MADE MORE SENSE.  DIDNT LIKE HOW YOU WENT DOWN TO A 2syllable RHYME SCHEME AT THA END TOO AS THAT IS FAR TOO BASIC, I BASICALLY MESSED UP THA CONSISTANCY OF YOUR VERSE AN MADE YOU CLOSER WEAKER THAN YOU STARTED, YOUR DEFO IMPROVING THO AN ITS NICE TO SEE........ THIS IS CLOSE TO CALL BUT IM EDGIN IT TO ADOLF AS HE WAS MORE CONSISTANT AND HAD BETTER RHYMIN, IF WRATH HAD CLEANED UP THAT ''STREAK'' WP AN FINISHED HIS VERSE LESS BASIC YOU WOULD HAVE TAKEN THIS BATTLE..... FAIR IS DROPPED!

''IT BASICALLY MESSED UP THA CONSISTANCY OF YOUR VERSE AN MADE YOU CLOSE WEAKER THAN YOU STARTED''.... GOD DAMN TYPOS LOL.

thanks for the vote man i kinda messed up that streaking line with typos mean to say he wouldn't be streaking in this originally lol imma just have to be more careful with it did the same shit in my battle with eastes in the PYW tourney too lol