hawiian punch is a drink, black and asian is known as blasian,  just incase u not up to date

also california, the west side, is know for having earthquakes

i found the following lines to have potential which didn't surface kinetically coz of the execution -

its parable that me and u were ever pairable either in real life or on a website

west side so u know i make the earthquake

come here, first gear u might be right next to me, switch gears ima have to use my mirrors, to see if u even close to catchin me

much like the hawaii line from young where you started on the hawaii concept but ended it without anything related to hawaii which made most of the potential lines seem like mere fillers. i found both to either have the same drawbacks or worse.

coz flow here though had nil attempts at any creativity other than the rhymes you basically end up writing filler shit when you do that and that is exactly what happened to your verse here in fact much more than too young's.

i believe both of you do have potential but need to work on directing your bars to a certain concept or play for it to have any sort of sting man. coz a boxer maybe strong but never win a fight without knowing to throw skilled punches in a fight man.

too young get this one fair but only coz he was less bad instead of being better.

BOTH VERY SIMILAR ACTUALLY, TOOYOUNG HAD POTENTIAL WITH THA ''WEBSITE'' CONCEPT, NEXT TIME INSTEAD OF RHYMIN WEB SITE WITH WEBSITE, USE THA WORD ''WEBSITE'' IN YOUR BUILD-UP AN MAKE THA PUNCHLINE HAVE A DOUBLE MEANING, RHYMIN THA SAME WORD JUST LOOKS TOO BASIC DUDE.  YOUR LYRICS ARE MORE AUDIO BASED, IN TEXT YOU NEED TO DO MORE WITH YOUR SET-UPS AND PUNCHLINES, EXPAND ON CONCEPTS MORE AN STRETCH IDEAS OVER A WHOLE BAR.... FLOWTAGIOUS SIMILAR ADVICE AS YOUR OPPONANT REALLY, YOU HAD POTENTIAL WITH THA ''BITCH I EXERCISE - EGGS I FERTILIZE'' PART, HAD YOU STRETCHED AN EXPANDED ON THAT IDEA YOU COULD HAVE HAD A CLEVER BAR.  2nd HALF OF YOUR VERSE YOU HAD ALOT OF ''I WILL DO THIS'' AND TALKIN MORE ABOUT YOURSELF, YOU NEED TO FOCUS YOUR BARS ON 100% ATTACKIN YOUR OPPONANT...... TOOYOUNG GETS MY VOTE HERE AS HE WAS ATTACKIN HIS OPPONANT THROUGHOUT AND MORE CONSISTANTLY COMPARED TO HIS OPPONANT..... KEEP ELEVATIN THO GUYS, FAIR IS DROPPED!

Cool thanks guys, but yeah i write my shit as a song or in a song kinda format so it will sound very hard if u spit it, no point to me if ur not making the verse to be spit or performed, also

i use the concepts from previous bars to start new bars so it flows right 

And last but not least, what about all the poetic devices used in the verse along with keeping or having a similar rhyme scheme throughout?   

Really hard choice here. I felt both verses were almost identical, and not in a good way, both were pretty much rambling without heavy punches although they were at least aggressive against their opponent. I guess one verse entertained me a little bit more and that's why I'm voting for it. Fair's in.

Both need to work on making their bars more direct but one had more impact imo. Loser's punches weren't as funny and the winner had more shit that I liked. 

Both should read more battles and try being more creative, punches were either basic or not direct enough here.

Flow has better flow. Some part sof TY was a little tough to follow, had to read it a few times and go to the expo in the comments (eg blazin = blasian). Every time I read "eat yo wac ass up" I think it's meaning "eat yo ass", and with the other lines like "make you scream", "come here baby", "right next to me" it sorta feels a little too romantic to be a battle.