Suleyksejun Kriid brought 1 more bar than his opponent, which got him an easy victory here.

LANY: I read your expo, so I think I have some vague conception of what you were trying to do here. On an abstract level, it is kinda cool. However, this is a rap battle. You need to do two things: 1) rap 2) battle. You did neither. I honestly couldn't find anything beyond "hola/comma" that even resembled a rhyme. Also, when you try to pull off wordplay, the words have to sound exactly alike. "Pen states" and "Penn station" don't even slightly. "Pen's statin'" would have been better (but still an absurd stretch). You had this idea about the Long Island stations building into one punchline, but the "extended the 5th", even if it was a punch (I don't really get it) was a single, very basic punch which had taken you your entire verse to build up to. Instead of weird abstract concepts like this, try to focus on the basics– rhyme each line, attack your opponent and for now just focus on executing some basic simile punches. Also, don't use line breaks at all. Just keep typing until you fill the box. Check out other battles on the site to see what you should be aiming for, if you're interested message me and I'll send you links to some battles I'd reccommend.

SK: Sorry there isn't much to say to you. The 1-bar was obviously enough for this battle but I think you can do better. It seems like a minor thing, but your first line didn't actually make sense. If he was seeing "3 in his crib" because he was "with his brothers and sisters" then that must be at least 5 people: LANY, at least 2 brothers, at least 2 sisters. Just by being careful and writing "brother and sister" you could have avoided this, so make sure you always double-check your work to make sure it makes basic logical sense.

what was crazy about this battle I was caught up in the system as a child. How'd he guess that. Good shit.

 wow clear hate .. u even said it was ass. but no clear hate deletes on nun of mines ..lmmmmmmao ok mod!!

IM SORRY LANY HAD NO IDEA WHAT YOU WERE GOIN FOR HERE, YOU SET THA LINES OUT LIKE YOU KNEW WHAT YOU WERE DOIN BUT AS A READER I WAS VERY CONFUSED, PLEASE COMMENT AN EXPLANATION FOR YOUR VERSE COZ IM CURIOUS AS TO WHAT WAS HAPPENING IN THIS VERSE....... SK THA ''ONE BAR(ish)'' WAS A COMICAL START, THIS WAS BASICALLY 2 SEPERATE LINES THO AS THEY DIDNT CONNECT WELL WITH EACHOTHER TO MAKE ONE ENTIRE BAR.  YOUR MULTIs WERE REALLY GOOD HERE THO DUDE AN I ACTUALLY REALLY LIKED THA CLOSING PART...... SK GETS MY VOTE HERE, FAIR IS DROPPED! 

It was a play with words  about some stops on the long Island rail road. When I said what ever my penn states. (NY penn station). I get a lil High Mini holas. (Hola is hi and spanish and mini is another word for little and I was also refering to a town in Long island called.  All the other bars was the same. The begining bars wasn't ment to strike my opponent. It was to lead up to Like the borough I extended the 5th( a Gun) nassua ( nassua county is the 30 min from queens.) get it now?

the towns called mineola

If going to be honest neither one of these punches made any since to me....KRIID come on fam this was bad even for your standards of what bad is but at least u had multi's

Lany wow go read some battles ask for help on how to write appealing bars writing shit like this will get u a limited edition box set of L:s with the special features and director's commentary

Both of u deserve the L lol but by default KRIID get the vote

Did y’all not read the part where I said this is filler. I made this in fucking half a minute to snipe the battle. I just want to get to 25-7

@LANY EXPO IN COMMENTS AS SOON AS YOU DROP THA BATTLE NEXT TIME, IM FROM THA UK SO I HAD NO CHANCE OF UNDERSTANDING WHAT YOU WAS SAYIN.

This one isn’t close. Better everything from Kriid. Even tho the bar sucked, it was still better by comparison. Many have given advice already to both so I’m not.

SK clearly wasn't trying but LANY was coming with some really REALLY reachy wordplays. I get what you're trying to do, but those wordplays do NOT sound the same both ways. So Kriid wins for nor repeatedly violating a cardinal sin of how to write bars. Fair's in.