Guts out here bullying kids, DAMN!!

EoA

Rapping right and hacking right is officially the first ever capped multi from savage so gonna give him props for the elevation and the efforts he finally putting but the rest of his verse was pretty scattered in terms of rhyming and as well as conceptualization.

Guts that vatican city was fire man. Why dnt you use more stuff like that in ur battles with better battlers man? Anyways easy win here for guts again, savage take a day or two to write ur next verse and only post it once ur truly sure it really adds up to all the expected criterias here.

There were some things that I didn't like about guts' bars, but I won't bother going into that because the main purpose of an expo is to help people improve, and guts knows what he did wrong here - he just didn't care. His opponent could learn from some of guts' other battles, as well as those of big names on the site, such as Jimmy Hoffa, Edgeworth, and Rai. I think there might be some potential in you, savagesocietygunna, but you didn't really have proper punchlines with double meanings in your verse. Fair's in.

sav takes it easily

SAVAGESOCIETY IS LEARNING TO STRETCH HIS CONCEPTS OUT MORE NOW, THA ''DIGEST - STOMACH IT - SHITTIN ON - CHOCOLAX'' WAS ACTUALLY A GOOD ATTEMPT DUDE.... SAME WITH THA MATRIX STUFF IM LIKIN HOW YOUR MATERIAL IS MORE COMPLEX, YOUR ACTUALLY WELL ON YOUR WAY IN ELEVATIN. THA MAIN THING FOR YOU NOW IS TRYIN TO END EACH BAR WITH A SOLID PUNCHLINE, ALL YOUR BUILDUPS AN STRETCHED CONCEPTS ARE GOOD BUT THEY NEED TO BUILD UP TO YOUR MAIN PUNCHLINE, FOR EXAMPLE YOU COULD HAVE ENDED THA MATRIX CONCEPT WITH SOMETHIN LIKE....... he must be tha ''glitch in tha matrix'' as hes ''the one'' that ''NOBODY LIKES!''......... SEE WHAT I MEAN? THA BAR HAS A PUNCHLINE ENDIN AN THA SET-UPS ARE QUOTED, THA WAY YOU WROTE IT WAS SELF-HYPE AN YOU NEED TO DIRECT IT AT YOUR OPPONANT, ONCE YOU HAVE YOUR FINAL PUNCHLINE YOU THEN WORK BACKWARDS AN FIND A RHYME FOR ''NOBODY LIKES'', USE IT IN THA LINE BEFORE AN MAYBE PUT A MORPHEUS REFERENCE IN THA SET-UP TO THAT RHYME SO IT STRETCHES THA CONCEPT OUT LONGER, IM ONLY TRYIN TO HELP DUDE COZ I DO SEE SOME POTENTIAL IN YOU....... GUTS YOU HAD A FEW SPELLIN MISTAKES IN THIS VERSE WHICH WAS LAZY, WASNT FEELIN THA FIRST BAR TOO MUCH BUT THA CLOSER I REALLY LIKED, ''CROSS ABOUT THA LACK OF BARS LIKE A DRUNK IN THA VATICAN CITY'' LOL, I MEAN ITS NOT FRESH AS FUCK BUT IT WAS REALLY WELL WRITTEN....... IN TERMS OF A BATTLE GUTS WINS THIS FOR BEING MORE DIRECT TO HIS OPPONANT AND ACTUALLY HAVING PUNCHLINES WITH SET-UPS..... SAVAGE IS ON THA RISE THO.  FAIRS IN.

Guts got it despite really bad wording on that first punch. Ssg just was all over the place couldn’t really connect a thought together so punches were hard to come by. Rhyming was also really rough, and guts was smoother in that sense.