Toke Loc I wasn't familiar with your work before but this is a reasonably solid verse. The way you work rhymes throughout a line is effective, but it would be more effective if you tried to string together more complex multies than the simple-but-effective 3-4 syllable ones you were using. Your flow was very smooth but try to use more creative concepts. Your "good knight" bar was probably your best but it wasn't a very original concept, try to branch out and take a few risks with some more creative wordplay.

eminemsumo113vreal your verse wasn't bad but you really need to work on consistency of multies. Most of your multies did rhyme with something in the verse, but its important to have a clear scheme. While you're still learning the ropes I'd recommend just sticking with one scheme consistently, and when you switch it up to the next scheme make it a clean break instead of mixing between them like you did in the first few lines (and less so in the rest of the verse). Your final bar with the Jesus' shoe similes and things like that had all the trappings of a conventional punch, but Jesus' shoe seems like it would be quite valuable and I don't know what "G like Q" means so this bar really didn't make sense to me. Try and make sure everything you write makes sense not just to you but to someone reading it that doesn't know what you're aiming to do with it. Also if you're looking to have beef with Arthur Morgan I'm already hyped.

One had a nice attempt with some okay disses but he was lacking in the rhyme category whereas the other's rhymes were on point till the end of his verse but he did enough to beat the other

i repesent flow this was flow