Expo’s. 1: To whack ya dick is to jerk off

2: He is full of shit.

3: Base (not tip) of bullet is made of steel (which is made of iron). 

4 and 5: B.J Penn is a mixed martial artist. B.J stands for blow job. He doesn’t know a “pen” as in penitentiary, only a pen as in a writing tool.

5: Sway lee had a song called “it’s better to lie.

6: Vekel the Man is a Skyrim character from the thieves guild. He allows you to steal anything from his tavern.

7: Basically he is going to get fisted.

*Swae Lee

good battle,second verse had some ill puns lil puns combos just gave him the lead enough for a win,good battle though,fair vote

The opener of one was fire. The other was just kinda just scattered. Potential but not everything rhymed and better metaphors couldve been used. Fairs in fellas.

Fuck I just realized I used hand twice my bad.

Bulletholes -

This 45 make em say oooouuuuuu like Young MA/ Can't figured who dude is like to switch genders he fruit cake/

i could sense the metaphor here but the wording and set up made it seem ineffective 1/5

i'm ed gein i eat my victims he child play /Said challenge him 45 seconds for audio must of wanted to get off on vocal take/That's gay/

same thing as the first bar and this even tho had much higher potential seemd okayish 1.5/5

what would slay say he knew these things hiphop just rappers with all these mood swings till that tool sings/I got a light on me that shine bright seem ancient like Khufu's coffin/

this was full of self hype no real diss here and that khufu could have been set up as a diss but coz the lack of a set up it just came off as random and obscure 1/5

this boom bap coughing/ next time try and make me target / i'm a kill this clark kent/fuck it i keep my enemies close like batman/then i made ya cap span body found by dectivedan after i spray like aresonal cans/

good concept bad execution with no multis cant rate it higher even tho i want to 1.5/5

Total - 5/25 (20%)

you gotta bring in more multis (even two syllable ones wil do) to your verse bro, and then cap em too. you already have the metaphors i suggest you practice designing them in such a way with set ups that they surface as punchlines disses instead of random fillers and self hypes man.

Culture -

SNIPE. Yo dumb homie? ‘This emcee as wack as his hand with his dick, emcee BULLETHOLES. I’d say “eat shit” but clearly you already FULL ‘IT THO. You look like you need some iron in ya diet, so eat a BULLET HOE.

couldn't feel the punch much here just rating it for the multis other than the iron line which was pretty good 2/5

With ya begging for a loss like that, looks like ya wanting to give me a B.J. The only penn you know is the one in YA HAND. this could have been framed way better man, it was a good concept. 1.5/5

You saying your a gangsta, after all Lee said it’s better to lie, ya just following advice, this is why ya wrong, SEE SWAY? You fine with me stealing wins from ya, like ya Vekel THE MAN.

again a good concept under utilized 1.5/5

You assface motherfucker, you can’t talk to my face, so talk to my fist, and chat with DA HAND.

this was just gay all the way man lol 1/5

Total - 6/20 (30%)

i liked the way you bring in new concepts to your verse, this one in particular seemed pretty rushed however i would like to see lines from you which dnt require to be proof read too every now and then coz i believe that will help you elevate to the next level with your battling too plus your multis were pretty ordinary and weak here too.

Overall -

Metaphors - TIE

Wordplays - Culture

Punchline - Culture

Multis - Culture only coz Bulletholes didn't have any

Vocab - TIE

Imagery - None

Fairs in guys, all the best !

PUNISH shit !!