Snipe food

Typo: I Steer clear of what this LITTLE HOE WRiTES

Red - You dont get a lot of points for hardly filling the box and also your lines were too simplistic and lacked the pow factor

Orochi - Had decent concepts with some broken multis that affected readability but still delivered some nice ideas.

The fair is In

Okay this one is an obvious win for Orochi. Red pepper didn’t even attempt to fill in the box, and barely anything rhymed. Here’s a shitty review anyway.

Red Pepper: Multiple problems with your verse. Firstly, you need to fill in the box. It’s a  16 line battle, fill it. And don’t use linebreaks either. Secondly, have multi’s. Multi’s are multi word rhymes. And when you include multi’s, make sure you capitalize them so we can see the multi your trying to type. Thirdly, ditch any and all self hype lines. They usually don’t make good set-ups, and they never make good punchlines. Fourthly, calling yourself Omega isn’t a good thing. Being an “omega” is being the worst there is. Fifth, have punchlines. Look at Rieper’s battles, he has good punchlines.

+ Is a rookie so he can improve

- Didn’t fill box

- No multis

- No punchlines

- Mostly self hype lines.

- You dissed yourself by calling yourself an omega.

Orochi: Decent verse. However here are some things you can improve upon (I honestly think you put too effort into beating this dude. SHouldve ended him in 2 lines). Firstly, you had some broken multi syllable wise and rhyme wise. Best examples for both are Socrates/Obese and Vision Heart / Plane Does. However I fuck’d with the flow of the first part of the verse. Your punchlines were pretty average, matter of fact everything about this verse was average. Not bad. Not great.

+ Nice Flow

+ Average verse

- Broken multi’s.

I'm not sure how to feel about Red Pepper's battle, I think of Peppa Pig when I see his lines, guess I know where he got the name _(._.)_/.

Red won this

i like Orochi srry

PUNISH

I felt like winner was experienced and loser was a newbie