DOG PACK's verse had some interesting writing, but the rhymes and punches weren't always clear to me. HeavyMetalHero had easy-to-identify and reasonably high-quality multies built in a well-structured and solid verse, which won them my vote.

DOG PACK my biggest piece of advice for you is to check out some of the other battlers on the site, to try to get an idea of how they battle. CAPITALISED, multi-syllable rhymes at the end (and/or middle and/or beginning) of each line are probably the best place to start.

HeavyMetalHero overall this was a very solid verse where you focused on getting a string of well-rhymed hits in on your opponent. However, both your execution and your creativity could do with a little work. I know that its perfectly acceptable to have a multi which is broken up by the presence of a non-rhyming syllable, but to space out parts of each multi as separately and consistently as you did is really pushing the boundaries. Try to keep your multies as undisrupted and compact as is possible. Furthermore, try to mix it up with some wordplay and metaphors. The Blockbuster Video line was a good start, but try to do more of this and also elevate it to another level. I'd reccommend battlers like Rieper, Edgeworth, Shodan, g u t s and others as people that do this very well.

Easy win. Fv 

both were kinda of simpler, but heavy was nore creative, had more multis, n slughtly better grammer. dog pack has potential just needs to structure better. fvno h8

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