Expos - 

Vantage means point of view

PUNISH shit !!

NICE BARS

good battle fellas my fair vote is.tossed

I feel like OG 187 won this one. OG 187 had the better punchlines and wordplay IMO

og straight yarbage

OG, this was a decent verse some of this came across as simple to me and punches were not creative and lacked a hefty punch. You have potential and decent multis but two syllable rhyming will not get you far so I would aim to make them 4 or higher 3 the lowest. Other than that your verse didnt edge much for me and I felt it couldve been better.

Nick. This was a solid verse compared to OG and edged the win you had more than two syllable rhymes your set up and punches seemed to hit better and came across more creative than your oppenent. Over all this was good keep grinding the fundamentals.

Fairs in GB no hate

thus was close, og was nice but a few confusing words, i feel like nickle edged this w more creativity n better flow. fv no h 8

Og Dallas texas verse was kinda cool some lil punz rhymes,lil stream,the guy from india nickleshanandan he had a verse that to much some caps punz punkz streams streaks rhymes he for the win,fair vote everything,good battle y'all

honestly a tough one here OG is nice no doubt and nickles did his usual thang. Fairs in boys punches and multis from both were dope

OG 187: Decent verse. Liked the Cock Between teeth And the call your bluff lines as they hit harder than anything in your verse, and the first had some really good multi’s with it. However, there are multiple areas in which I believe can be improved. Firstly, you have a few broken multi’s. Most notably MANE has 1 less syllable than LITTLE LAME. I wouldn’t capitalize little in this instance, because nothing rhyming with little ever appears in the verse after that. As well the “call your bluff line” is one more syllable than the play hard rhyme. Secondly, some of your rhyming was a bit loose. For example, Heart doesn’t rhyme with Dawg, and for a two word multi, all words are supposed to rhyme. Offer and part your doesn’t really rhyme, because the first part of Off- is too far (in enunciation) than Part. Third, you had a few too many on each word rhymes. You had 3, but you should only have one word rhymes if you have a longer battle, such as a 32-64, as coming up with multi’s for every line is very difficult. I’d say 5 is the most for a 32, and about 8 for a 64. 1 in a 16 line is excusable, but in an 8 you should be able to come up with something better. Fourth, some of your metaphors didn’t make very much sense, which hurt the effectiveness of your rap. For example, the “like white bitches” doesn’t really make any sense. And if I’m missing something that should make sense, it’s still your fault as you were supposed to include expo’s in case people don’t understand metaphors or wordplay. Had to give you a 1 in wordplay as well, as I didn’t see any wordplay, and if there is, you need to put it in “ “ quotation marks. Nothing special in vocabulary. Also you need to work on your formatting, as you should have a comma for cock between teeth and lock e between cheeks.

+ Very descriptive

+ Some great disses

+ A few good metaphors

- Some Metaphors Don’t make sense

- Broken multis

- Loose rhymes

- Some poor formatting,

Rating : 6.6/10

Nickle: Good verse here. You had some good disses, particularly Sex in role playing games, Imception plot twists, diss at vantage. However here are some things that can be improved / criticism. 1: Don’t rhyme just for rhyming. This is especially prevalent for the solitary blanks and dilatory skanks line. If it’s a cypher, rhyme for the rhyme, if it’s a battle, rhyme for the diss. 2: You had a lot of broken multi’s syllable wise, here’s is a list (of lines that break from the syllable scheme): Sex in role played games, Dignitary of wanks, Abaiting tables. Other than that your verse was really good, props. 

+ Great Disses

+ Expansive vocabulary

+ Great multis

+ A good example of wordplay

- A lot of broken multis

- Too much rhyme for rhyming.

Rating: 7.8/10