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rack i see improvement already fairs

Loser had good ideas but his execution could have been better. Some multis were forced like in the opener and closer. Your setups could have been better, punches weren't landing with enough sting for me. I did like the 'REMOTE I LAND' wp but the multis were slanted. Better execution and you would've took this.

Winner's execution was better. Opener was witty. Some of your setups were too obvious like 'doing chores' which made the punch lose some sting for me since it made it too easy to figure out what you were going for. I liked the clsoer, funny af and well executed. I felt you used your concepts better, and you had cleaner wording so your punches came across with more impact.

Good California emcees going at it in a text battle I think Fresno is the go uhhead w,his verse was a flow of raps ftw,he had a stream of good liners combos and writtens a seven(7)and second emcee from fermont he had a good written buht his raps whas kinda scat and diss connect wash"t royalty and a rate around(3)three gb

Racketeer won

close battle fellas thought one edged it out here my fair is tossed!

Racketeer: No multi breaks in terms of syllables, however a lot of multi breaks in terms of rhyming. Remember, at least 2-3 words in the multi have to rhyme with your next multi, hence the term multi-word rhyming. You’re punchlines had good thought behind them, but a bit of a weak execution. For example the typewriter line, you could’ve referenced something with a name, to make the reference better. Decent attempts at wordplay as well. No words out of the common vernacular except for sitcom. 5/10 

+ Good concepts

+ No multi syllable breaks

+ Decent wordplay

- Major words in a multi should rhyme, should have at least 2-3 major words in a multi.

- Poor execution behind lines.

Kru:Shul: Firstly, 

Krushul: Firstly, The same thing I said about Racketeer applies with multi’s. Only difference is, yours had a lot of looser rhyming. For example, Dreams doesn’t really rhyme with Weak. Weak also doesn’t rhyme with Teen. However, if you switch out weak, it will rhyme. Same thing with fag and fam. They may have similar beginnings, but in rhyming, it’s usually the ending that makes the words rhyme. Phonetically FAM sounds closer to FAN, due to the motion of the mouth shape you make for saying each word is closer than it would be to FAG. Your punchlines were mediocre, but like Racketeer, could use some improving when it comes to execution. Not too many attempts at wordplay I can see, and the metaphors you had were pretty weak. You had no words out of common vernacular, and spelt “the” like “tuh” for no reason. For example, when I switch out “ya” for “your” it’s because “ya” is a lot quicker sounding and flows better than “your” and “you’re”. However “the” and “tuh” have the same time to say, and tuh flows a lot worse than the.

+ Decent punchlines

+ Slightly good concepts

- No good metaphors/wordplay

- Poor word choice

- Broken multi’s

- Far too loose rhyming

Full sweep: Racketeer