Jay Diamond this verse attacked your opponent and was an actual battle verse which gave it a chance of winning. Keep doing that. However, your opponent used more rhymes than you and had them as complex and effective multies alongside some basic wordplay, which was enough for Casper to take home the W.

Casper my advice for you is to tighten up those multies. “His own DNA/lineal claim” doesn’t match. For starters one has 6 syllables and the other has 5, this is an easy way to spot your multies aren’t on point. You had a few errors like this in the verse which stopped it from reaching the level you usually do. Also try to word things more naturally, like the second line didn’t really make a great deal of sense to me.

Winner had a broken multi in his opener, the punch was nice but needed a better execution. The bar about coke just didn't land for me, not a good play on the concept there. Closer was okay but your wording in this verse could've been a lot cleaner, like the multis could be smooter off the tongue. The more choppy your shit is, the less sting the punch is gonna have.

Loser didn't really bring anything solid here. Still needs major work on the basics like multis and actually structuring his bar. Till you fix them up you cant really work on the complexity/creativity side and till then your an easy target for peeps who have the basics down. Also, the ideas you ARE using aren't set up well, so the punches in this verse had little sting.

casper was far superior and better executed battle BSA

Jay  not bad im starting to notice schemes with the punches you should of came a little harder especially if it was a personal battle knowing that you were going against competition. Casper you did exceptionally well id keep up the work nothing to critique from what I have before 

Fair vote, No hate Gbs

Dnt think Casper took this seriously, but her still kinda gets the battle coz Jay was'nt even rhyming in some areas let alone rhymes his metaphors were all over the place i am pretty sure he writes when he is high and just cyphers in battles now lol dude would do better in cyphers and audio freestyles text is just no his thing. loved the shhhhananigans bit tho that was lmfao stuff

I didn't even have to look at this battle to know that this was going to be an easy vote. I don't believe that I need to explain why Casper here dominated in all categories but if Jay wants to know then he may DM me personally. I mean voting for Jay is basically the equivalent of getting my VP lowered although I have to give credit to Jay for spelling things right this time..... ffs FV