Wardniap you've got some potential and did a lot of rhyming, but you need to work on filling up the whole box like Red Baron did here. Try to look at other battlers on the site (I would recommend Danny Tanner, Rai, Lil Kilo as some active battlers right now dropping verses in the style you should try to master) in order to get an idea of how to format verses and structure them.

Red Baron your verse had some nice multis and good similes/metaphors. However, often the capitalisation of the multis was a bit confusing and made it seem much messier than it was. Please only capitalise the syllables that actually rhyme, so for the first three you would go "JORDYN WOODS/HOARDING WOOD/James CORDEN HOOD" because James isn't a part of the multi. This happened a lot in your verse and made it a much less smooth read than it should have been.

Red Baron takes the W for filling the box, using numerous complex multis and punching hard with some nice concepts.

Red Baron had this one

RED BARON had  stream of rapz andwas a little better he had some e extra rapz that put  verze in front for a w,gb

Winner took this for having more content and having sting to his punches. Some shit you could improve on, like the multis being the same length and not being slanted. Also, some of your ideas could've been worded/executed in a better way to get a stronger punch.

Loser should fill the box and not press enter after every line. Read some battles and see how a verse is structured and how punches are set up, multis etc. You didn't have enough to take this one. 

Imma give it to red baron u came and cooked in this one fair vote

Wardniap ur almost there juss punch more and be more focused and direct 

Wat I said on the other one 

Fair votes on this one. Ward could work on some metaphors, punchlines, multies, get a little better understanding. HE HAS POTENTIAl however, I had to be honest. 

Ward you should read up on some battles for future refernce you not filling the box no multies creativity or clever punches really made you lose this one.

Red you are doing good I would say work on clever punches and word play also some capped rhymes didnt rhyme the multi you were presenting so just double check that. I see potential though.

Fairs in gbs no hate.

Nice bro. Keep at it.good punches and delivery. Ward check so.eother battles fr structure and formatbut defi etly pote tial

Snipe?

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@Wardniap You just gotta fill up that box, other than that, I've got nothing.