fare well... welfare.. word flip... you got the thang um lookin for my man!! jay i love your verse man!! i got my winner based on rhymes... and scheme..

Casper verse was hard to read at some times, formatting wise. I liked the healthcare scheme. The irony, home iron jeans line.

Jay, I need more heat than this. There were some good multis lined up but I need the punches too. Like battle rap punches. Take the free flow writing and turn it into something more. Like with the "can can" line you coulda said you'll shoot him twice. Cause can=gun. Something like that. You know.

I hope this doesn’t come off as biased but Casper Theone first line only made sense and cud have lead to a much bigger punch if was set up well.. like Starting up with the Heathcare and Making it come second? 

Other  than that Casp just tricked down to a boring short story telling..

JayDiamond you tried challenging him but none of your lines made sense to me , like I'm standin on balcony"s shootin shottys,(shottgun) so wher u tryna rhyme and then expo at the same time? Lol 

anyway I believe you can improve from what you have written here and the previous drops of your opens.. 

7/5 Casper

I feel Casper one this one had concepts and punches that flow'd well with those criterias. Jay youre not too far off from getting started and staying with those punches that sting and playing off them. I'd just say dont forget your in a battle cypher not just a freestyle cypher.

Casper wins, obviously. Casper, going forward you want to try and up the complexity of your Multis and try to hit the 4-6 range consistently in your lines. As well, some of the lines are a bit too on the nose and could stand to have an injection of creativity. Jay was jay and so that’s why this one is settled.

I gotta go with the 1st...he put more effort in his concepts...

Second guy make the words that you rhyme CAPITALIZED & make more comparison jokes & jokes with metaphors

my winner was a little easier to understand so that wins it, gb