Azaz had some interesting ideas but really needs to work on having multies for the rhyme schemes and CAPITALISING the rhyming syllables to make it easier to read. WOLFCHAINZ I found your verse genuinely enjoyable and amusing, with ideas that made me think but that I could get without the expo. However, although it was cool to maintain the same scheme through the verse, it would have helped to have longer multies (I've been told four is really the minimum but I don't really know). You had some solid wordplay and punchlines, but the rhymes were what really prevented you from taking it to another level.

Expo: 1: Butchers beat large cuts of meat with tenderizing hammers, and use cleavers to cut meat. 2: Incase anyone doesn’t get it the Tweezers line implies his dick is so small she needs tweezers to give him a handjob. 3: if you stick your thumb and your index finger out, you make a finger gun (gang symbol), If you take your index and middle finger out, it’s what you use to finger someone (Pleaser). The other line implies that you will die as a gangster before you will be able to get a girl, but that this guy isn’t being a gangster or pleasing any women.

felt wolf was better, but expanding his rhymea wouldve been better, azaz should cap his rhymes. fair vote..

Thanks guys! What i can assume from this is that the rhymes need to be worked out more,and the multi’s need to be longer. Thanks for the feedback.

AZAZ YOUR VERSE WAS HARD TO FOLLOW, I WAS UNSURE WHERE THE RHYMES WERE ALOT OF THA TIME, IT WAS ALMOST LIKE READIN A LETTER OF EMAIL, WORK ON YOUR STRUCTURE AN CAP YOUR RHYMES DUDE COZ YOU OBVIOUSLY HAVE GOOD IDEAS AN CONCEPTS, JUS GOTTA DELIVER THAT SHIT A LIL BETTER...... WOLF SPENT ALOT OF TIME TALKIN ABOUT THA OTHER DUDES DICK (even tho tha butcher part made me lol), BUT WOLF HAS TO GET THA VOTE HERE AS HE HAD MORE ATTEMPTS AT PUNCHLINES AN HIS SHIT WAS SET-UP BETTER AN ALOT EASIER TO FOLLOW..... FAIR IS DROPPED!