Squammy woulda got a higher rating if he hadn't had those first two lines that didn't rhyme (TRASH BARS/LAP DANCE? Nah, fam). Overall I feel had some pretty decent punches, a few were played out (sent/scent was a prime example of that). mc lul you need to up the amount of syllables in your rhymes. 1-2 syllable multis ain't gonna cut it (goes for both of you, tbh). You also need to get a bit more creative with the punches you throw. Calling someone a worm ain't really gonna connect unless there's something behind it driving it. Also avoid the pauseworthy shit (I eat your prick for dinner, for example).

SQUAMMY

Oh thanks for the challenge squammy! This is the first one where I’m not feeling that fucking silly. I got a lot of hate for the second but you’re my third maybe it’s better the third time around or Or maybe I’m just hell-bent on doing better at these motherfucking words ya heard.don’t know how many times its been for you but Fuck you you little neck beard wearing living in your moms basement battle curved in havin asspunk! So take this with a fuck givin; and leave room in your mom’s trunk ha ha that’s where I’m puttin my bike ya lil mmama boy kitten!!!

Yeah. Squammy with a very solid opening, with nice references and multis from the start. Then bam bam bam with the punches. Lul needs to practice his multis, and needs to capitalise his multis for better viewing.

SQUAMMY got this one clearly despite a few rookie mistakes. He got this one with much more developed rhyming, punch attempts, and verse consistency. Lul was just basic and his verse felt like it was all over the place. Squammy the few mistakes I mentioned are the ROUNDs line (shits basically a joke around here), the wording of your wordplay in that it needs to make sense both ways (what does it mean to be god scent?), and using a decent amount of space in () to explain a line. You should never waste space in your verse with a sentence in () that’s not part of your verse. You can just include it as an expo in the comments.

Just in reply to Rieper, remember people have different accents to you. I was raised in a family with Southern English accents so to me Dance, Bath, etc are all words pronounced with an ar sound (Darnce, Barth, etc). If you think stuff doesn’t rhyme take a second to imagine it in someone else’s voice first, because otherwise you’re marking people down on ignorance. I appreciate the other feedback though my man. 

Multi's vs mono's easy call

squammy that was underwhelming.. you can't use "rounds" as a metaphor for everything round cuz it doesnt add up lol. Tits arent bullets, and they're hell of alot more fun lol.. plus, they dont really make soft bullets.. and even with your accent. Darnce and Bars dont rhyme, man. Its a reach to say otherwise, and Im sorry to say that. The ideas were there but I feel like alot of the punches missed the mark. Lul had a ery strange flow, and it took me a couple reads to be able to get through the verse and it not be super choppy. The punches were extremely underwhelming and the concepts seemed to be a little childish Im not gonna lie ....... Overall, Im voting for the verse I enjoyed more.. Squammy has it for me for that reason. Neither really brought anything to the table in terms of content or punches.. but I feel Squammy had the more enjoyable verse imo. Fair vote guys !

@Chekkit first line sets up that I'm talking about soft rounds as in weak bars, rounds of a battle not bullets