Got MaCc taking this one with the better constructed verse overall. Liked how he had a cleaner read here for the most part from top to bottom. Few minor wording issues (saying you pot heads doesn't make sense. How do you pot heads?), but overall this was a fairly good verse. RBB in this battle you actually DID cap parts of the rhymes that don't match up (YOU LESS A THREAT/BEST DUDE FERGET) the only syllables that rhyme out of the whole thing you capitalized are the last two syllables of each set. That isn't proper at all and it gives off the impression you don't know what you're doing. The whole Road Block/wet cement idea was good, but the execution of it was awful due to the wording of it just not being clean at all, which was sort of the theme of your whole verse. Take notes from your opponent here on how to word your verses in a more proper manner that conveys your ideas better.

explaino-i just left a group i mentioned at the end before anyone is to open the battle. so i left during this verse is still in blind. so chose to depart from that group....also my internet connection is terrible n i just read my previous feedback from the other recent battle w/ korvis this verse still be not any better than the other one...so im goin to try my best practicin w/ wordin n other proper verse writing on paper. thanks

Refer to this thead for a breakdown of how my voting scorecard works: https://www.letsbeef.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1164742#post1164742.

RoadBlockBoy

3 Points:

2 Points:

1 Point: Wet Cement, 

0 Points: Cant Address It (????), Behind Bars (just way too basic and played. didn't get the -1 because I feel generous)

-1 Point: Lowest Lane (EXTREMELY played WP, arguably a bite at this point as its been done so many times, also ur slow like a slow train? nah)

-2 Points:

Total: 1 

Macc

3 Points:

2 Points:

1 Point: Swishers, Picture, Angriest Dog

0 Points: (there was a lot of filler between picture and dog)

-1 Point:

-2 Points:

+1 for Flow

Total: 4

MVGT: Macc

For this battle, I'm going to be relying on Edgeworth's "Boxing Style Scorecard." Check this thread for more information about that: https://www.letsbeef.com/forums/showthread.php?p=1164778#post1164778

RoadBlockBoy

Yo ya try 2 'write hard against me' but YOU LESS A THREAT, cuz u 'should remember ya lines still suck' so its BEST DUDE FERGET, cuz 'wordplayin against 'Road Block' is as 'pointess' as driving THROUGH WET CEMENT

> I've never been a fan of self-nameplays and this wasn't good enough to make me overcome that feeling. I understand what you're going for here and it's not really BAD so I guess it gets a point. One thing I want to mention is that the first two sections you put in quote don't really pertain to the punch IMO. Don't put stuff in quotes unless it's actually a setup. +1

you rap 'as slow like DA SLOWEST TRAIN, cuz Im like 'clark kent flyin thru traffic' while you'll b in THE 'LOWEST LANE'.

> Edgeworth specifically mentioned Lowest Lane / Lois Lane as an example of a bad and played wordplay, but I don't recall having seen it before. The setup about being as slow as the slowest train was stupidly redundant and the setup was wordy, however, so I'll withhold the point. 0

No more metaphors, i know ya RAPS AINT IMPRESSIVE, u 'try 2 write a message' but dis MAN CANT ADDRESS IT, u act 'tough like prison' n writtens but ya cant BEAT THESE RHYME PARS, cuz 'it sounds like ur still in da penitentiary' cuz you'll alway BE BEHIND BARS.

> I'm hesitant to award any points to a bars / prison concept in 2019 to begin with, and there was nothing in this line which made it better than the 400 million similar ones that people have used for decades. The wording was off, too. What are rhyme pars? Pars like in golf? Have you ever heard of anyone talking about how good their rhyme pars are? I definitely haven't. -1

Overall: 0

M A C C da G O D

Roads Goal Was To End The Legend? Tuh! You're Not 'MAKING IT MISTER!..I've Been Planning My Attack! Patiently 'WAITING TO DISS YA'..As I 'Pan The Scene?' i'll 'Pot-Heads' Like Im 'ACHING FOR SWISHERS' just to let The Cannon 'Flash In blocks Face w/o TAKING A PICTURE!!'

> First off, I think part of the setup here was extraneous. I get the flash in his face / flash photography double meaning, but what does a block have to do with anything? Am I missing some basic photography knowledge here, or did you just in a word to make the concept seem more personal while destroying whatever sense it made? As for wording, this was not good. It's ungrammatical to say that "You'll potheads" considering that potheads is a NOUN and not a VERB. Still, this bar had a pretty much average punch so it can earn you a point. +1

..DAMN! & Since U Wanna 'Beef Buddy' you'll Get 'Beat Bloody' So Stop 'CLAIMING YOU RAW!'

> Alright, even though the part about him wanting beef is borderline pauseworthy, this is a clean short line based on a concept that I haven't seen before. A solid hit. +2

you're Always the 'LAMEST TO BRAWL!' like Your Entire 'AIM IS to ANGUISH US ALL!'..No One Quotes Ya Shit, Homies Only 'FAMOUS FOR FLAWS'..You Aint Bussin 'Real Nines' All You Do Is 'Steal Lines' and Bite The True Vets Like 'The ANGRIEST DOG!!

> Firstly, I want to point out the switch in topic after the first multi in this line. Really good bars usually attack from one angle throughout the entire bar, while this one suddenly swapped from him being unquotable to his supposed habit of plagiarism. This is a minor mistake, but it's also the sort of mistake that can separate high-tier bars from middle-tier bars. This line also provided another example of your poor mastery over when to use quote marks. You put quote marks around the punchline, but not the main setup phrase (Bite the true vets). Speaking of that phrase, the word "True" didn't need to be there since the double meaning works just as well without it. Another trait that separates boys from men in text battling is aggressively pruning verses for every word that doesn't need to be there. This saves space for other material, while also easing the reading experience and improving the flow. I can understand the temptation to emphasize your assault on the opponent's character with amplifications like that, but it's a bad choice, and something that you need to make a serious effort to rid yourself of. With all that said, this was a passably written bar with a barely passable concept, so it earns you one measly point. +1

Overall: 4

Macc wins with a verse which was more clearly written, contained better concepts, and (obviously) earned him more points according to me. Fair's in.

my winner showed excogitate and less gasconading invited some idiosyncratic and magnanimous belonging to one's peculiar loser who had an individual character but not enough luminescent which the winner clear had as he jizzed all over this battle FAIRZ IZ JIZZINN !

Agree with the 3 breakdowns here, basically RoadBlockBoy's wording issues caused him the L here but Macc barely took this.

Fair vote in.