Dayum, i like that you're atleast attempting to insult bnas here cause alotta newbies have been dropping cypher versesbin battles lately. However with that said you first and foremost need to fill ur box. Never hit enter. Also, look up multisyllablic rhymes and learn how to incorporate them in ur verses as they are a must in battle rap. You'll also need to build ur complexity to increse the effectiveness of ur punches. Read some battles on the site to get a general idea of what i mean.

Bnas.. U did use multies ill give u that but ur punches were very weak.. Little to no setuo and no wordplay or complexity whatsoever. I understand u tried to play down to the competition but id like to see u always bring ur A game homie.

G battle guys fairz in

Not much to say. One had more content and actual punches.Dayum, fill the box and try incorperating some metaphors and double entendres to help get your punch across. Fairs in.

Both need work but one had a more complex verse and filled in the box to get more punches off.