Expo: Leave "e" a wide grin = if you write "E" on a piece of white paper, burst/cum on the middle bar of the "E" and knock it sideways its a wide grin.

Commas are pauses.

Good luck Erk no hate bro

Laat line should be "only time Lil Bitch a Tough Champ"

Dope post by both, but gotta go with Erk, to me his just had better flow and seemed to have a better execution with his punches, no H8 fairs in

TonganKidd, I am impressed with your ability to structure your verses properly, you had some nice rhyming between the multi sets too, your main issue is, your set ups... It's one of the most important things, because it ultimately decides how hard the punch hits. Your kinda bringing face value stuff, or reaching like the grin bar. You gotta find the balance. In terms of Erk's verse, the big multi sets are cool and all but the creativity was lacking a bit too, like Lil Bitch A Tough Champ / UFC womens divison is just so straight forward, your "Plot Away A Head" set-up was a good idea, you can come up with alot of stuff to make that hit, you just gotta think about it in a more damaging way, villian in prison is ehh. Think about incorporating common phrases and idioms into your verse, that way your set-ups will resonate more, don't over do em though. Alot of them have been used, so you really gotta flip them in creative ways for em to hit. That piece of advice goes for both of yall... Anyways, I am leaning towards Erk in this specific case, because he was a bit more creative here, but not by much.... t'was a close one. Fairs in.

Both was good but I liked winners flow no hate vote back