Ok now i can see i would have left alone - nice 

Not to bad of a comeback bro, I'm new to LB as well so looks like our first 2 battles are against each other man, guess it's a showcase of the rookies ay

Jason... You have alot of potential. Be mindful of your multi sets, (capped parts) you want them to be the same syllable count, otherwise it's considered a broken multi. You will get docked points for broken multis... I noticed alot of self hype, in this, which is normal in rap, but not battle rap, you want to create punch lines, preferably about 4 punchlines over-all (for an 8 liner), and set them up with the parts in "quotations". Ensure they are all aimed at your opponent. Flip their name, where they are from, things like that. I noticed you are already using WP. (Wordplay), disguise like Zoro was okay, but Zoro doesn't really diss guys. The double meaning doesn't make the most sense, or its not that hard hitting anyways. Creative wise, you aren't that bad, you just gotta redirect it in a different way. Careful with using played ideas as well, luck / four leaf clover, is an example. You always want to be thinking outside of the box. I hope this helps, take it one step at a time, try to read up some of the more experienced battlers, and see what I mean by constructing a punch line.

Kirking, you did well in terms of holding an idea, but the idea itself, cross / jesus has been done alot of times, also you didn't fill the entire space given, you will be docked points for that. You have to try and rhyme a little more throughout to give it a cleaner and more enjoyable read, as I told Jason, try to think outside of the box, and try to incorporate alot of set-ups into your punches, that way you can really amp them up. Also, check out some more experienced battlers and see how to construct a verse, there is generally a certain style here on LB, that you should be able to catch from reading some tournament battles or something.

In conclusion, in terms of this battle, I believe Jason had the better verse, both made alot of errors, but he showcased alot more creativity, and his verse didn't seem so simple like Kirking's did. He also filled the box, where as Kirking didn't.

5-3, fairs in.

I try to fill the box but i get to 8 lines before its full? the box sizes on the actual post are different to the writing stage? 

Tips for both; avoid broken multies. Meaning example: always make sure your capped rhymes are same syllables. Lotion. Potion. Both one. Correct. Lotion. Commotion. 1 syllable vs 3. Incorrect. This sometimes goes unnoticed in audio battles but never in text battles. Avoid any unnecessary hype. Always aim at your opponent and less about yourself. More punches/disses are better. Be creative. Say some shit no one else would think to say. Take your time putting together your bars. Proof read everything you wrote before posting it. Always fill your box. The more content the better. Don’t be basic with your multies ( capped rhymes). One syllable rhymes aren’t impressive. Just make sure they make sense. My winner here executed more of what I explained above than the other. GL to both. 

I see your trying Jason. Multies are broke left and right. Multies need to rhyme as close as possible with the syllables. Ex: NOW ITS OVER, sorry mate, u just used your last FOUR LEAF CLOVER....."now its" and "four leaf" doesnt rhyme, but the syllable count is correct. Loser still didnt fill box. Losers setups to punches need to be expanded on. You only come with tiny jabs, no real punches. Punches need to sting.